Nowadays, some parents put a lot of pressure on their children. What is the reason for doing that? Is this a positive or negative development for the children?
Nowadays, because the study becomes one of the most important things in each children’s life so all parents pay a lot of attention on it and each person has their own way to promote their children. Some parents put a lot of pressure on their children to have the score that deserves the money and the time they spend. In my opinion, it has advantages that outweigh the drawbacks of that situation.
On the one hand, having too much pressure sometimes make the kids depressed or autistic because too much pressure from their parents makes them feel that they don’t have anybody to share the difficulties with and they are lonely. The newspapers have state that there are many children have made away because of they can’t find anybody to tell about their story and one day they can’t suffer it anymore. The another disadvantage is it will bring the children far from their parents because they can’t talk with their parents.
On the other hand, if there is no pressure from parents, the children won’t have any target if they can’t decide it. I’ve seen many parents don’t put any pressure on their children but just a small amount of their kids have high score. Most children are not aware of what they need for the future, so parents’ pressure is very necessary. And having pressure since they were children can help them get acquainted with responsibility they have when they are adults.
In conclusion, having pressure is still having some drawbacks but the advantages are outweigh and almost children need pressure to try their best in studying
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, still, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1308.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8624535316 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40358650039 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498141263941 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 395.1 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7446773063 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.909090909 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4545454545 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09090909091 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285200724813 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143422244662 0.084324248473 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0891291081537 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205215657183 0.151304729494 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626245685884 0.056905535591 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.76 8.58950901804 79% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 78.4519038076 42% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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