It is true that the improvement of medical care will be related to the decrease of mortality where the human can take the opportunity to live longer. There are some arguments among people whether improved medical care will take more beneficial or it would be some drawbacks. I believe that improving this sector leads to a positive way.
Fundamentally, medical care is the most way that people can save human species by the invention of technology and bio-engineering to support as medication. It means that the human population would be higher than before. However, the next problem will come where these populations need space for their home living. In developed countries, medical care is good so that the country has a dense population. For instance, In Japan, life expectancy is high enough caused by an improvement in medical sectors but Japan is not a big country. Then, If space cannot full-fill those inhabitants, the cost of home living will increase dramatically.
On the other hand, improved medical care has many benefit for most countries. Firstly, the more older people who have a long life, the more chance of those countries to have experienced people and teachers to transfer their knowledge. For example, more than 50% of Japanese are people in the range age group more than 60-year-old. but this country is remaining productive because those people prepare the younger generation to be professionals in some sectors such as technology, farming, IT and others. Secondly, the growth of the economy is related to how many productive people can work for their country. If improvement in the medical sector can support the older generation, the country will take benefit because the year of retirement and pension can be extended where the number of productive people will grow.
In conclusion, medical care brings to the beneficial affection to those countries which can manage the asset of people even if the side effect will produce the growth of the population significantly.
- In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 60
- Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this can not be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 73
- Some people believe that employment over the age of 60 is not right and creates lots of problems. So people should retire after 60 and not work.agree/disagree 73
- In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. others believe the money should be spent on improving the existing public transport. 67
- Nowadays many people want to buy famous brands of clothes cars and other items What are the reasons for this Do you think it is a positive or negative development 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 46, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun benefit seems to be countable; consider using: 'many benefits'.
Suggestion: many benefits
...e other hand, improved medical care has many benefit for most countries. Firstly, the more o...
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Line 5, column 92, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'older' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: older
...enefit for most countries. Firstly, the more older people who have a long life, the more c...
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Line 5, column 265, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...knowledge. For example, more than 50% of Japanese are people in the range age gro...
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Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
... range age group more than 60-year-old. but this country is remaining productive be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1677.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12844036697 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81827137381 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507645259939 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 539.1 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3367352626 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.8125 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4375 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.875 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222271644051 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794870154911 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467052497183 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146842978452 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468534834506 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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