In a recent survey conducted in this country, it was found that up to 20% of twelve year-olds in some schools were showing early signs of nicotine addiction.
In the eighteen to twenty year age bracket the percentage was as high as 70%. A large contributing factor to this high level of addiction is attributed to the uncensored TV advertising of cigarettes.
For this reason all cigarette advertising should be banned.
Research found that nicotine addiction in young people is caused by uncensored TV advertising and society is finding the way to stop it. I agree that all cigarette advertising should be prohibited from all media. However, advertising is not the only significant cause of smoking in young age.
Advertising of cigarettes in various media platforms such as TV, websites, and billboards should be censored or banned from juveniles. There are many reasons to support this idea. First, young people are not always monitored by their parents or teachers. For example, they could watch TV or walk into the places where cigarette advertising is appearing. At that moment, the guidance from parents or teachers is not there to instruct them about those advertising in every chance. Second, advertising of cigarettes may lead to the starting point of nicotine addiction among groups of youngsters, if the presenters are their favorite stars. This is because young people are usually have their role models or icons to follow their style and activities, in which smoking could be one of them.
Other factors which profoundly lead to smoking addiction in children are content in the movies or TV series and family members who smoke. Young people sometimes could not differentiate between what is right or wrong from the content in the movies or TV series. For example, a protagonist in the action movies they watch may save the world from villains which is an appropriate content. However, there could be a scene where the protagonist is smoking and children want to try it because of that person is already their role model. The other cause of smoking in young age is family members who smoke. This is the difficult problem to solve as children could not choose what kind of family they want to be in. When they are grown up in the smoking family, it is undeniable that children may see smoking as a common activity, which easily leads to a tryout.
In conclusion, I agree that society should ban advertising of cigarette in media in regards to smoking in young age. Nevertheless, there are other significant factors which could trigger the habit of nicotine addiction in adolescents such as movies' content and smoking family members which people should also aware and find solutions to solve these problems.
- The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. 56
- The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. 84
- The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 73
- Do you think that modern technology such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information Give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience 73
- In the eighteen to twenty year age bracket the percentage was as high as 70%. A large contributing factor to this high level of addiction is attributed to the uncensored TV advertising of cigarettes.For this reason all cigarette advertising should be bann 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... the places where cigarette advertising is appearing. At that moment, the guidance from pare...
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Line 7, column 82, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
...d ban advertising of cigarette in media in regards to smoking in young age. Nevertheless, the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1923.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 384.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0078125 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65007324118 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453125 0.561755894193 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 590.4 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.255586921 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.210526316 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2105263158 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0340604774826 0.244688304435 14% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0142379016415 0.084324248473 17% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.015088276479 0.0667982634062 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0265531811203 0.151304729494 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0081685826627 0.056905535591 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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