Some companies sponsor sport as a way to advertise themselves Some people think it is good while others think there are disadvantages Discuss both views and give your opinion

Essay topics:

Some companies sponsor sport as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages
Discuss both views and give your opinion

The way of advertisement has changed over the time, nowadays sponsorship is a common among the others ways. Some argued that there are many benefits for advertising, while other people think it has more drawbacks. Both views are valid, in my opinion, the advantages more than disadvantages

On the one hand, some people claimed that advertising is modern art and it a key part of modern business. The most obvious advantage is that companies can tell us about their product, without it we have fewer choices. For example, most of the people know Nick and Adidas brand through their advertising in the world cup of football.Also, advertising is a creative industry that employs many people, without it, there would be high unemployment.

On the other hand, although, there are advantages of sponsorship they are also some disadvantages .Sometimes advertisement can manipulate people, especially in cloth trend.Furthermore, as we live in consumer culture, advertisement companies persuade us to follow the latest trend and encouraged us to associate a certain brand with a higher status. Moreover, children can easily be influenced by advertisement and some of them put pressure on a parent to buy think.For instance, my smallest brother asked my father to upgrade his phone with every new series.

To sum-up, the benefit of sponsorships is a controversial topic, in my point of view the advantages of it overweight the disadvantages.

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Average: 6.6 (36 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1220.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 230.0 315.596192385 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30434782609 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23105207982 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 176.041082164 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.604347826087 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 382.5 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.2111524976 49.4020404114 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.5 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.75 20.7667163134 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.375 7.06120827912 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258746359502 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110088434197 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747833933364 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148356976594 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0981727839049 0.056905535591 173% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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nowadays sponsorship is a common among the others ways.
nowadays sponsorship is common among other ways.

in my opinion, the advantages more than disadvantages
in my opinion, the advantages are more than disadvantages

advertising is modern art and it a key part of modern business.
advertising is a modern art and it is a key part of modern business.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 233 350
No. of Characters: 1169 1500
No. of Different Words: 140 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.907 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.017 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.982 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 81 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 61 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.889 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.197 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.388 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.674 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.122 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5