Although retirement laws have been enforced in many countries in order to promote their labour productivity, some people claim that it is not a sensible proposition for industries to lose skilled workers. Personally, I feel that old staff have to be replaced with new generations, and I will outline the reasons here.
To begin with, in many countries, particularly developing nations, a large number of young graduates need to be employed in different job opportunities, but the main obstacle might be the number of vacant jobs which are comparatively much lower than applicants. For this reason, the retirement laws have been introduced to condemn employers to replace old workers with younger staff, hopefully contribute to tackling the issue of unemployment. This means that the while addressing effectively the consequent problems among young ages, ranging from the ever-rising criminal behaviours to the social decline, it seems to increase the living standards.
Furthermore, the more younger workers involved in the industrial processes, the more creativity, physical abilities and thus productivity can be eventually preserved. This is mainly because they have been academically well-trained, and are able to use state-of-the-art technology in the industry for longer hours compared to old workers. This is perhaps tremendously beneficial in terms of industrial outputs, especially when combined with the more incentives and senses of hardworking and career ambition to progress the career ladder.
Of course, some may think differently, claiming that old employees have a wealth of experiences which have been hardly achieved, and will be definitely invaluable to overcome potential problems in the workplaces. However, continuous training programs during working hours by seniors to improve new employers` working experience and in-depth knowledge seem to render these concerns insignificant.
In conclusion, I believe that the replacement of old workers with new generations would appear to be a wiser course, as it can make desirable effects on the employment rates and industrial labour productivity in the long-term.
- An American film actor one said "Tomorrow is the best important thing in life". How important do you think it is individuals and countries to think about the future on the present? 11
- Some people believe that a gap year between school and university is a good idea while others disagree strongly Consider both sides of this debate and present your own opinion 89
- Some people argue that it is not wise for an industry to replace its experienced but old workerswith new and young yet inexperienced individuals.To what extent do you agree or disagree? 84
- Every year several languages die out every year. Some people think that it is not important because life will be easier when there are fewer languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? 84
- Many people today are worried about young children using video games What problemsmight these games cause for children and society as a whole How could these problems bereduced 92
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 68, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...tries, particularly developing nations, a large number of young graduates need to be employed in ...
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Line 5, column 18, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'younger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: younger
...e living standards. Furthermore, the more younger workers involved in the industrial proc...
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Line 7, column 103, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[8]
Message: The adverb 'hardly' is usually put between 'have' and 'been'.
Suggestion: have hardly been
...yees have a wealth of experiences which have been hardly achieved, and will be definitely invalu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, thus, well, while, i feel, in conclusion, of course, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1829.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.715625 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23999511718 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615625 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.134734097 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.272727273 106.682146367 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0909090909 20.7667163134 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.63636363636 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129868528133 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520377593592 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0307091976784 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0783971521579 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.030397939164 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 13.0946893788 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 50.2224549098 67% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.49 12.4159519038 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.7 8.58950901804 125% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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