It is true that the security of society in some parts of the world is alarming. This puts the governments' officials under the pressure to looking for the main causes and bringing up feasible to prevent the problem from further exacerbated. Some inhabitants argue that this case appears because the guns are always used by a police to solve a criminal act. I personally tend to disagree with this notion, while i opine that there are more important reasons behind this vexing issue.
On the one hand, a police holds a responsibility to tackle of violence in the urban or suburban areas using a gun. An obvious example of this happens in The United State, a man killed more than ten people in the cinema using a weapon, while a police shot in the foot to paralyze him. Obviously, police officers can force a criminal to surrender, because they have a weapon which will prevent an escaping criminal who poses a serious danger to the public. In addtion, those guns from the police act as a deterant against people having elated and illegal behaviors. It is undeniable that people tend to fix their behaviors nicely when seeing a police guy heading towards them with a gun. It seems to be our own natural instinct.
On the other hand, there are 2 major factors in terms of reasons which make the level of violence be on the rise. The first and foremost reason is subjective to parents' neglect or inappropriate child- raising ways. Most of the parents nowadays virtually devote their whole of time to work in order to ensure material well- being, which means that they may spend less time to take care of their children. Without their supervision, children can may friends with malevolent friends outside and then become depressed and anti- social youngsters. Therefore, parents should equip themselves with specific knowledge and skills to provide proper and adequate childcare which are deemed to be the key of youth violence increase. Moreover, the growing rate of the unemployment causes higher property and violent crime rates. They yield that unemployment triggers participation in insurgencies, prompts people to joint violent gangs, drive people to extremism and that is the primary cause behind domestic violence.
In conclusion, based on the aforementioned discussions, one may conclude that the practice of police bringing their guns with them is not the main culprit of violent growth. The accelerating rate of violence should be ascribed to the combination of parental care and the rising popularity of unemployment.
- At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages? 73
- Some people believe that if a police force carries guns, this encourages higher level of violence int hat society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? 78
- The number of overweight children in developed countries is increasing. Some people think this is due to problems such as the growing number of fast food outlets. Others believe that parents are to blame for not looking after their children's health.To wh 89
- Some people think that governments must insist on preserving traditional appearance of old buildings undergoing renovation or redevelopment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? 56
- It is common practice for some students to take a gap year between high school and university in order to do charitable work abroad in underdeveloped countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages for young people of doing volunteer work? 89
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 411, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...end to disagree with this notion, while i opine that there are more important rea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2106.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 421.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00237529691 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.699054386 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 176.041082164 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565320665083 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1058652642 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.842105263 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1578947368 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78947368421 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.9879759519 326% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189506890668 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052626833914 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404243490186 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111105590903 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520358935166 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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