Leading a decent and comfortable life is a concerning matter to everyone. While a group of people are of the opinion that staying in current situation, even it is not satisfactory, is crucial. However, others believe one should put all of their efforts to upgrade their living conditions. I do agree with the latter.
On the one hand, the opponent of changes is afraid of taking any risks.So, They are unwilling to step out of their comfort zone as they saw it as a devastating experiences. To clarify, in their viewpoint, by resigning from current job there is no guarantee to find new one and the situation become even worst by struggle to pay bills, rent and any other expenses. Another perceived benefit of being hardwired towards alteration is yielding valuable skills like tolerance since harsh conditions turn us to be far more patient and be respectful to what we have.
On the other hand, other group of individuals encourage alteration. Making efforts to conflict with bad situation will eventually turn to success. Take Ronaldo as an example, his family was poor when he was a child but he did not let it to stop him to become an upstanding football player by doing several part-time jobs to earn more money to hiring coach. Having said that if a person show enthusiasm and made a sincere effort to make a difference in their life then the progress will be inevitable.
In conclusion, it is true that avoiding alteration and be resent with bad situation could have advantages under certain circumstances however, I believe giving up unsuitable career or lifestyle can open the door to new magnificant opportunities.
- At the present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people Do the advantage of this situation outweigh the disadvantages 56
- The plans below show the layout of a university s sports centre now and how it will look after redevelopment
- The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now and plans for its development 73
- It is important for people to take risks both in their professional lives and their personal lives Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages 84
- Many museums charge for admission while others are free Do you think the advantages of charging people for admissions to museums outweigh the disadvantages 56
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 72, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...f changes is afraid of taking any risks.So, They are unwilling to step out of thei...
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Line 3, column 299, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'even the worst'.
Suggestion: even the worst
...o find new one and the situation become even worst by struggle to pay bills, rent and any ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, then, thus, while, in conclusion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1359.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90613718412 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85939265699 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.646209386282 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.1272259163 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.25 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0833333333 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.08333333333 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120343641867 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.041646315666 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0393380975581 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0725239225336 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0198889251595 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.