In the modern world, the debate of whether money should be invested in establishing sports facilities in improving healthy lifestyle has gained a significant attention from general public. I am of the belief that sports complexes are not the best answer and education is a more suitable option.
People who advocate the idea that there should be more recreation facilities might argue that the greater availability of those sports centres would encourage people to work out frequently. Hence, people's health can be improved. While i partly agree with this view but it is unlikely to have an effect on unhealthy masses. Most health problems do not stem from a lack of opportunities, but from a lack of motivation. For example, Cambridge University found in a recent study that 62% of men and women who paid for an annual gym membership failed to go entirely after just one month.
A public awareness campaign about the dangers a sedentary lifestyle would affect not only people’s well-being but also their understanding of the issue. This is because most men and women are unaware of the harm they are doing to themselves by not exercising regularly and warning them about the risk factors would have a motivating effect. For instance, the ‘Go walking’ campaign in Northern Ireland in 2006 led to obesity-related illnesses, like heart disease and stroke, falling by almost a quarter.
In conclusion, although an increased availability of sports centres can influence the wellness of the public to a certain extent, it is only through education that the real benefits can be realised.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 174, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...has gained a significant attention from general public. I am of the belief that sports complex...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1340.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13409961686 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92942384315 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.620689655172 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4741157786 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.818181818 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7272727273 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.18181818182 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190237684688 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688115466532 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0372616829307 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103654973689 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.016886332784 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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