In recent year, because of the revolutionary advancement in modern technology, most people agree to focus in some issues such as science and technology in the school curriculum instead of paying attention to history that is the others’ priority. I will explain my opinion, which is admitted the latter view.
On the one side, technology has become inalienable part of human’s life in modern era. Therefore, having information about technology and science might be critical, especially for students who would be encountered with a variety of up to the minute equipment. Also, this opportunity prepares them to invent and make an effort for building a more suitable world. However, implementing history helps them to use the technology in the right way with regard to this issue that learning about the past often gives a glimpse of future.
Turning to the other side of this story tells us that history and culture are the foundation of the society and informing students about them is fundamental. Firstly, the society who knows about its culture would not be recurred the previous mistakes that their older generations had done. Secondly, history gives students right set of circumstances to applied experiences in their lives. As an example, Japanese students have a world’s history course, which is known as gold course because their teachers believe that after entering this course to school curriculum since 1980, the development in their country has a significant effectiveness.
In conclusion, although science and technology play an important role in children’s future as a strong tool for inventing and making world a convenient place for living, I believe history would change the future generation toward more experienced people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 80, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...onary advancement in modern technology, most of people agree to focus in some issues such as s...
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Line 1, column 255, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tory that is the others' priority. I will explain my opinion, which is admi...
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Line 2, column 93, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...art of human's life in modern era. Therefore having information about technology and...
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Line 2, column 265, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... variety of up to the minute equipment. Also this opportunity prepares them to inven...
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Line 2, column 447, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...to use the technology in the right way. As this aspect that learning about the pas...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1481.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36594202899 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97432433167 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594202898551 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.9329838577 49.4020404114 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.416666667 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206952442578 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678713315331 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506885600715 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129825424491 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532559171857 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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