It is undeniable that music is mot merely a source of entertainment, it is also a form of communication. Many people believe that music effectively integrate society regardless their ages and cultures. Personally, I completely agree with this opinion.
Firstly, people from every nations in the world, having the same interest in some particular genres of music easily feel affection toward each others. They can talk about their music styles, share their hobbies and enjoy music together. As a result, they have chance to make new friends or even join together as a group. For example, an avid fan of ballad music who usually attend ballad concerts may meet other passionate people there, they get close and be friend easily as they pursue the same genre music or a band.
On the other hand, music can be a source of motivation which encourages people to express their concealed feeling or to take action as what they truly want to express but they have always cover it. For instance, soft music in wedding party convince people to talk and dance with their friends or spouse, throw back their beautiful memories and confide in each others. Therefore, they gain better understanding of others. That is how music work in refreshing and enhancing mankind love.
In conclusion, I believe music play a vital role in connecting people together despite their national difference and generation gaps. Therefore, we must wisely use music to develop our society relationship and contribute to built a prosperous civil.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Line 3, column 189, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'covered'.
Suggestion: covered
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1264.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.056 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65159876301 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.62 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 403.2 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1081405416 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2307692308 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2307692308 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.46153846154 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210587501798 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762849068762 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051764395616 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139000382828 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0226768628581 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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