Some people think that in order to prevent illness and disease, governments should make efforts in reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In Present days air pollution is the biggest issue cross the globe, due to this deterioration can caused various disease. Government could take steps against this problem.

On the one hand many diseases and illness created by this environmental pollution such as industrial waste, water contamination, vehicles which is produced hazardous chemicals such as carbon dioxide, carbon monoxide and so on, through this, adverse effect on people health. Government should provide better living condition for those person who cannot buy home and therefore reduced the potential of humans getting illness and disease. The second reason is providing more accommodation for public also an effective solution to reduce health risk. In current scenario many people are homeless while other have to live in poor condition so they can more close to viruses which makes disease. By providing shelter and better life quality government can prevent the endemic disease such as malaria and dengue.

On the other hand, many common diseases like obesity, heart problem as a result of unbalanced diet. It could be prevent if government promote a health diet and regular exercise. Government also spend money on research and development of medical field. Any breakthrough in health sector like a cure for cancer could save thousands of people or prevent the rise of any potential epidemics.

In conclusion, I accept that improving environmental and housing problem can prevent illness and disease. I also believe that people protect from the health problem.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 329, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this person' or 'those people', 'those persons'?
Suggestion: this person; those people; those persons
...uld provide better living condition for those person who cannot buy home and therefore reduc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, second, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1303.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 241.0 315.596192385 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40663900415 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69108810716 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.626556016598 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 405.9 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9697065578 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.230769231 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5384615385 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23076923077 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213096262473 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738526659117 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478601297257 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128904606938 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0393412468195 0.056905535591 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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