Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The fact has shown that people's average lifespan has gone up significantly over recent decades, but the number of children who were born every year has been witnessing a significant decline. Therefore, that sets up a controversial discussion about whether Governments should raise the age at which workers retire. I totally agree with the idea with some reasons which shall be examined in the essay in detail.
Initially, the current retirement age in most countries throughout the world is quite low, whereas they can still contribute to national socio-economic developments. For instance, in Vietnam, female workers would stop to go to their workplaces when they reach 55 and that for man is 60, then the government would have to pay them the amount of money monthly called "retirement salary". That not only makes some companies lose their experienced staffs but also create numerous negative effects on the economy.
Moreover, it is apparent that raising the retirement age will definitely help the old have their own abilities to do anything they want without their children's financial support. No matter how rich their son/daughter is, old people always want to survive independently. When people grow old, they can suffer some diseases, they also hope to travel to enjoy life. Thus, if they still have a job to earn, they can afford to pay for medications, travelling and will not be a burden for their children.
In a nutshell, I always hold the thought that people should continue to work until reaching a higher age than now. In terms of workload, if the idea is accepted generally in society, it is highly recommended that companies have to give the elder people suitable positions with not too stressful works.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, thus, whereas, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1453.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09824561404 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85349677219 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638596491228 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4584731541 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.083333333 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18676274751 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686872114313 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440996121471 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110952702409 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0443843204932 0.056905535591 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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