Throughout the history, people dream to built a perfect society while they haven’t agreed how the ideal society would be like. What is the most important element you think to make ? How to achieve an ideal society?
It is commonly believed that a perfect society is the aim of many citizens even without have a vision of how the ideal society would be like. In my point of view, there are some crucial factors leading to an ideal society and fortunatuely, there are ways for us to achieve that. This essay will first discuss about some potential factors, then, it will point out few methods to lead to that achievement.
I put forward the idea that there are two most crucial factors that need to focus on the path leading to the perfect society in this modern life. The first one that stands out is the social bonding. A place where people have a strong bonding would tend to lead a better live. For example, family is a basic foundation of every society, and if family members can built a close-knit family, they would form a better society. Additionally, the range of knowledge of each citizen should be counted. A person with a good educational background would simply know how to behave in a good way, therefore the society would turn into a more civilized one.
In term of how to achieve an ideal society, it is undeniable that improving the living standard is never out of fashion. There is no denying that the higher the standard of living is, the more comfortable and satisfied the citizens feel. Firstly , the government should pay more attention on the education, especially since the children are still on early age as well as invest in the technology and the infrastructure in the city to bring convenience to the citizens. Secondly, providing opportunities for the unemployed to secure jobs should be counted as one method. For example, many enterprises boost their name by a good marketing plan, and the citizens therefore can register to be a future staff in those ones.
All in all, social bonding as well as citizens’ knowledge can not be forgotten to mention to make a perfect society and to achieve an ideal society, high living standard is first to recommend.
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Suggestion: ,
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...living standard is first to recommend.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, well, for example, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1634.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 344.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67367698577 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523255813953 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3949947129 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.933333333 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9333333333 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281248890639 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869935409289 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0973976533386 0.0667982634062 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181546590452 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0701011040169 0.056905535591 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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