We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people believe that we should not help people in other countries as long as there are not our problems. I disagree with that view because I believe that we should try to help as much people as possible.
On the one hand, I accept that we should help people in our community, our neighbors and fellow citizens. In most communities, there are easy to find people who are impoverished or disadvantaged in some way. There are often opportunities to volunteer time or give money to support people who are poverty. In Viet Nam, people can help in variety of ways, from donating clothing and food to a charity, and there majority of people need help. I can understand why some people believe that we should prioritize local charity.
At the same time, I believe that we also have an obligation to help people who live beyond our international borders. In some countries, the problem that people face much more serious than those in our community, and it is often easier to help. For example, there a ton of children are dying by curable diseases in some Africa countries. Government and individual can save their live by paying for vaccines that already exist. A small donation might be very helpful and help a much greater impact than helping in our local area.
In conclusion, it is time true that we cannot help everybody in the world, but in my opinion, national boundaries should not stop us from helping other people who are in need.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 184, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...I believe that we should try to help as much people as possible. On the one hand, ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 289, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...er time or give money to support people who are poverty. In Viet Nam, people can help i...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, so, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1189.0 1615.20841683 74% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6811023622 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56245987918 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531496062992 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 380.7 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.6660693871 49.4020404114 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.4615384615 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5384615385 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.30769230769 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274580190136 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113693558357 0.084324248473 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854927740668 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20228365547 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409780150088 0.056905535591 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 78.4519038076 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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