23.09.2017
Some people believe that children’s leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time.
Do you agree or disagree?
Many aver that only leisure activities that are educational in their nature are useful for progeny and thus spare time should be devoted to them. I do not agree with the prospect and below the reasons on which my stance is based will be discussed in details.
On the one hand, spending kids’ leisure time on educational activities brings a lot of fruits. Firstly, there are formative years from two to twelve when children’s brains and personalities are being shaped and studying, unearthing knowledge has advantageous impact on the development. Thus, the more they study via different activities the better. Secondly, the volume of information that must be absorbed by young individuals is immense and exploiting free time for learning the data as much as possible would allow them to achieve better academic at school and even college. In other words, implementation of the policy will have a great beneficial effect on kids school performance and overall development.
On the other hand, performing such leisure activities as chatting with pals, playing video games, watching popular movies and cartoons are important for children as well. Primarily, early age is very momentous period in life of any human bring during which not only brain structures are being developed but crucial social skills are being formed and mores of society are accepted. All of that should be acquired through interacting with other kids, adults and the environment. Additionally, a child is not an automaton that may endlessly perform an activity. In fact, offspring need have enough rest from studying and psychologists decisively demonstrated that entertainment such as playing computer or board games allow children to switch their attention on new activity and restore their ability to absorb new data. Thus, leisure activities that are not educational are useful as well.
To sum up, a point of view that descendants’ spare-time activities have to educate children and non-educational practices are useless appears to be incorrect due to benefits got by youngsters via performing the former ones.
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Essay evaluation report
only leisure activities that are educational in their nature are useful for progeny and thus spare time should be devoted to them.
Description: 'them' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns. You have this issue all the time
when children’s brains and personalities are being shaped and studying,
when children’s brains and personalities are being shaped on studying,
the more they study via different activities the better.
Description: wrong structure. it need to be parallel. like: The more you give, the more you get.
on kids school performance
on kids' school performance
early age is very momentous period
early age is a very momentous period
of any human bring
of any human being
In fact, offspring need have enough rest from studying and psychologists decisively demonstrated that entertainment such as playing computer or board games allow children to switch their attention on new activity and restore their ability to absorb new data.
In fact, offspring need have enough rest from studying, and psychologists decisively demonstrated that entertainment such as playing computer or board games allow children to switch their attention on new activity and restore their ability to absorb new data. //need correct punctuation marks to make sentence clear
a point of view that descendants’ spare-time activities have to educate children and non-educational practices are useless appears to be incorrect due to benefits got by youngsters via performing the former ones.
Description: what is 'the former ones' is not clear
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 332 350
No. of Characters: 1719 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.269 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.178 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.846 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.735 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.313 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.515 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.035 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Yes, it is on the topic. It
Yes, it is on the topic. It should be around 7.5 without errors.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, in fact, such as, in other words, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1779.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35843373494 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99084555512 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617469879518 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.3597197092 49.4020404114 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.071428571 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7142857143 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21105104898 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0720794457664 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420075098101 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13279376374 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0235030744998 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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