28/10/2017
People should work a fixed number of hours per week, and employers should not ask anybody to work more than this. Do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.
Nowadays a growing number of people aver employees ought to work only a certain number of hours and bosses should not be allowed to ask them to work additional time. Although this policy possesses some beneficial characteristics, I personally disagree with it. Author’s opinion and reasons on which it is based will be discussed in details below.
Firstly, working a limited number of hours has a positive impact on workers’ overall health and well-being because they are able to plan their day and allocate some time to participating in such sports activities as swimming, running or playing football. Moreover, some leisure time could be devoted to interacting with family members, friends and colleagues. Thus, having a better balance between work and life is one fruit of the policy.
Secondly, the implementation of the discussed idea would be fruitful for employers as well. Many psychological studies decisively demonstrated well-rested personnel has more enthusiastic, joyful attitude to work assignments. Consequently their productivity in average on twenty-six percent higher than the one of those who toil unpredictable and frequently long hours. This is another valuable benefit of the trend.
However, a blind fulfillment of the policy is rather unreasonably because sometimes firm’s management has to ask or even force their subordinates to work more, for instance, due to unexpected circumstances. To illustrate, an important project that is pivotal for company’s future might not be finished in time because a member of the team was severely injured in an automobile collision. Under those conditions, a head of the group could ask the staff to labor more because if a contract is violated, the business will go through financial hardships and downsizing. So, many folks who are employed by the firm will lose their job positions. In other words, in exceptional situations breaching the proposed policy appears to be a necessary evil.
In my opinion, the idea of limiting the volume of time spent at a workplace is an attractive one but it should be used wisely and reasonably because rare exceptions from the rule are possible.
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Essay evaluation report
and bosses should not be allowed to ask them to work additional time
Description: 'them' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
Author’s opinion and reasons on which it is based will be discussed
Description: 'it' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
working a limited number of hours has a positive impact on workers’ overall health and well-being because they are able to plan their day
Description: 'they' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
well-rested personnel has more enthusiastic, joyful attitude to work assignments. Consequently their productivity in average
Description: 'their' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
flaws:
the example is too long and can be removed:
To illustrate, an important project that is pivotal for company’s future might not be finished in time because a member of the team was severely injured in an automobile collision. Under those conditions, a head of the group could ask the staff to labor more because if a contract is violated, the business will go through financial hardships and downsizing. So, many folks who are employed by the firm will lose their job positions.
since there is already an example: 'for instance, due to unexpected circumstances. '. IELTS task II doesn't like long examples. one sentence is pretty enough.
instead need to give another reason.
2. No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2 //there are serious issues on pronouns.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 342 350
No. of Characters: 1765 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.3 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.161 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.981 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.532 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.288 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.544 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.022 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 226, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Consequently,
...c, joyful attitude to work assignments. Consequently their productivity in average on twenty...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, as to, for instance, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1837.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37134502924 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16054821375 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634502923977 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.0246314653 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.8125 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.375 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.875 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178894344795 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0530506862717 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531168469731 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100771944524 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559304985563 0.056905535591 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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