Children usually want to play the same games and watch the same TV programs as their friends. Should parents allow it or not? Give your opinion and examples from your own experience.

Submitted by ridi on Sun, 03/12/2017 - 07:22

The phenomenon of recently changing patterns of children toward sports & streaming content over the television come to the forefront. Some parents feel that their children should not watch the same content or play similar sports which their acquaintances. However, I agree with those who hold the notion that viewing the same content would feel them they all hop on the same cruise. In the following paragraphs, I will explore the rationale for both beliefs as well as proffer rationale for my own viewpoint on the matter.

Regarding those who feel that replicating their friend’s habits will damage their own personality, there exist valid reason the main justification is that imitating, put a kibosh on children own knowledge level. And, they believe that this will make their children seditious. The Oregonian reported just last week that 25% children who prefer watching same content or play same sports, usually suffer from depression, and become seditious when they were not able to perform in such field.
Nevertheless, I cannot hold that opinion in good conscious. The fact is that many children become more proactive and always bone up from each other. The Harvard report states that 100,000 parents of Austria who let their children watch identical content they always catch up and perform well in their life. Because of that, we have exceptionally devices that we don’t have to reinvent the wheel, for instance, we have a technology in place which help us get a noise-free environment on a land mass which is always surrounded by noise.
I hope that soon everyone understands this change and give they create a utopia environment for their children, wherein they foster at a better pace.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 459, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
... explore the rationale for both beliefs as well as proffer rationale for my own viewpoint ...
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Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., wherein they foster at a better pace.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, nevertheless, regarding, so, well, for instance, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 7.30460921844 274% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1437.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15053763441 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67954982131 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602150537634 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4489439751 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.75 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237320663675 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0886211763569 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747636903009 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137434639968 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0617746201628 0.056905535591 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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