Currently, we are living in a technological era. We can see tremendous technological improvements in almost all the areas of our work, entertainment industry has no exception which is also flowing with the wind. Video games are the one of the main inventions belong to this industry and its is mostly played by the adults. Some people say that it is a good development while others say that it is not. In my opinion it is actually a bad development.
First of all, video games are affecting children's social life very badly. They always want to spend their free time in front of such games rater than socialising with friends and family members. As a result they don't know how to act or behave in a public place, they actually living in a virtual world rather than the real one. Furthermore, many of the adults have health issues because of the lack of physical exercise, it is the main reason behind children's obesity problem.
Secondly, some of the digital games can create negative mind set in adults. They sometimes become addicted to that game and they never want to come out of it. For instance, recently a game called "blue whale", claimed life of many young people around the world. People who plays this game gets addicted to this and do whatever the game says, eventually leading the players in to self destruction.
Lastly, children are very vulnerable, they can be influenced very easily. So there is high chance of adults are being misleaded by these so called video games. For instance, some children are very much interested in war games, they enjoy killing people in the digital world. Hence they some time try to do this in the real world also, because they don't what is right and what is wrong. They are just doing it for the fun.
To conclude, it is evident that video games have more negative influence in adults rather than any other entertainment media, so it's wise use is always recommended.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, furthermore, hence, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1602.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75370919881 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56125547057 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548961424332 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.1467852783 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.3157894737 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7368421053 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26315789474 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0934418575906 0.244688304435 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.032177187091 0.084324248473 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0379103655203 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0544708893598 0.151304729494 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025157661558 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.0946893788 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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