Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults.Why is this?Is it positive/negative development?Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?------------------------------------------------

In recent years, Youngsters find shopping appealing in many nations exorbitantly, as it is their favourite choice of leisure activity. The major factor for this behaviour can be due to affordability and aesthetic value. However, the benefit of this development would be discussed in this essay.

To commence with, one of the primary reason that young people spend their free time in the shop is its budget. In the past, people could afford luxury trips to foreign countries in their free time unlike now which is the most reasonable fascinating experience is shopping. In addition to this, some adolescents find pleasure in shopping could be because of its materials artifacts value. They usually derive pleasure and satisfaction in acquiring beautiful things such as gadgets and costumes. To illustrate, By owning a newly designed material, individuals often have sense of joy, proved by a recent poll conducted in Nigeria found that around 70% of the youth enjoy operating electronic gadgets and devices as compared to reading.

Scrutinizing further, as a result of these factors, it is believe that shopping is beneficial to the nation because of enhancement of employment rate in the economy. If more individuals patronize retailers and spend money on their products, the investors would be encouraged to establish more businesses, therefore, multitudes would be enormously employed For instance , Ali newspaper in 2018 reported a 13% increase in employment in the shopping malls at Dubai; this is due to the growing shopping rate.

Hammering the final nail, I pen down saying, although products low-ends and its attractiveness entices young adults to spend much of their leisure time in shopping, I think this development is beneficial to the economy, not only because it offers employment opportunities for young people, but it also helps to exaggerated the economy.

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Average: 9.5 (3 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, for instance, i think, in addition, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1588.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3468013468 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9591379581 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.599326599327 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.0373659806 49.4020404114 182% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.363636364 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.63636363636 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196802765813 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735145398861 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544653971018 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123454232652 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507747552518 0.056905535591 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.92 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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