It is often observed that most of the professionals from the entertainment industry are highly paid. Some believe that this is suitable according to their efforts towards their profession, others do not believe the same. In my opinion, this is an extravagant expense towards individuals and in this essay further will be elaborate.
To embark with, the majority of the population admire personal skills like singing, acting, and sports activities. They feel that it takes years of practice and patient to achieve a key knowledge of the area and master it. Hence, entertainers become popular very soon and achieve pinnacle with their hard work. On the basis of their prominence, the glamour industry pays them well to satisfy their own profit and revenue as well. In a recent piece of news by "The Times", in the chart of richest person on earth have six artists out of ten, this is the result of the endorsement they have including their assets.
On the other hand, there are other professions that demand high skills and proficiency, occupations like doctor, scientist, army person and many more. Moreover, these categories of work-force are a vital part of our society but stay away from the glamour and constant spotlight for attraction. Although hard work is more immense and challenging, they are not paid well in exchange. In an empirical survey from London's Oxford University, about eighty percent of today's young population would like to be a part of entertainment industry instead of becoming a doctor or soldier because of high pay scale and glamour.
To conclude, however hard work and proficiency is admirable for the artist, but it is inevitable that other professions equally demand the same. So, it is biased, to support a huge financial difference in working other than the entertainment industry.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the richest'.
Suggestion: of the richest
... by 'The Times', in the chart of richest person on earth have six artists out of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, moreover, so, well, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1534.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13043478261 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81572381073 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602006688963 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0941433058 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.571428571 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3571428571 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123170004768 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0438322827399 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383420943556 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0747722053437 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348484677557 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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