Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money Do you agree or disagree Which other types of job should be highly paid The answer is a sample not written by myself The goal is to compare the sco

Some believe that film starts and singers and composers receive too much money. I completely agree with this statement and think that the doctors and engineer should be paid higher.

To begin with, music is not mandatory for us and we can live our lives without it, however, entertain professionals are taking too much money for their work. To illustrate, one famous singer take more than million dollars after launching a song in the market which is extremely high. Consequently, a huge amount of money are being wasted. Furthermore, in terms of film, the hero also demands a billion of dollars while doing a film. For example, the hero of Avenger End Game took several billion dollars for doing this film. As a result of this, a certain portion of a country's budget spent in an unnecessary field.

In the contrary, doctors deserve to be paid as much as possible. Doctors are playing a crucial rule in this world and we cannot live without them as they fight for our lives. In today's pandemic of COVID-19, the doctors are fighting with corona virus alone ,not the singers and film actors. In this case they deserve the highest amount of money so that they can motivate with their work. Furthermore, some hospital have not any research fund or lacking of fund because of wasting too much money on the music and film industry. Hence, government should spent more money on this sector rather than music so that doctors can find more innovative way to deal with diseases make the people healthier.

In conclusion, I agree that the entertainment industry receive too much money beyond their need in the world. However, the heath officials, doctors and hospitals are receiving less than that of musician. I think government should impose some rules to lessen the investment in film and music industry and increase the funds of hospitals and doctors.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply: 'a million'.
Suggestion: a million
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, furthermore, hence, however, so, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1538.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86708860759 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47312910486 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53164556962 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.162191324 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4705882353 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5882352941 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23529411765 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193761405503 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690535290344 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049166633943 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139885286114 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431471329555 0.056905535591 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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