Some people say that international sporting events contribute greatly to peace and stability in the world.To what extent do you agree or disagree?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.Write at

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Some people say that international sporting events contribute greatly to peace and stability in the world.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

In today’s world of crime and terrorism, events like international sports will help to bring harmony in the country and spread the message of peace and love among the citizens. There is an ideological verbalisation that ‘sports not only build better athletes but also builds better people’, it generates a feeling of nationalism among the people without the feeling of hatred for other countries. To what extent the countries will benefit by participation in worldwide competitions will be discussed further in this essay.

To embark on, sports played at an intercontinental level among the countries will help in building a healthy competition among them. They will play with each other with a positive spirit and enthusiasm. This helps to build a feeling of brotherhood among the people of different countries. For example, India and Pakistan though have a lot of tension at their borders, but the friendly cricket match between them helps a lot as the players from the opposing countries play in peace and harmony as well as it serves as a binding factor with in them. Denizens of various nations come close to each other, have a friendly discussion and sharing of jokes among themselves

Moreover, multinational sporting events helps to bring all the provinces together playing for their fame. For example, substantial events like Olympic games, commonwealth games help to bring sportsmen of various territories and contribute to their popularity. For example, people from places like west indies which is hardly known, when represent their birthplace on national events helps in the global recognition of their country. It also generates a feeling of patriotism when their national anthem is played and their flag is hoisted after winning the gold medal, additionally, everyone gives a standing ovation to that country. Furthermore, the internationally recognised sportsperson has a lot of fan following, who see them as their idols and follow their career paths. For example, Virat kohli a biggest fan of the of Sachin Tendulkar known as God of Cricket followed his career path to be a cricketer

To conclude, I completely agree with the opinion that when Sports played at International level helps in easing tensions between countries and helps to outspread the message of tolerance, peace, and companionship.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on and sharing of jokes among themselves Moreover, multinational sporting events ...
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Suggestion: a lot of fans
...rnationally recognised sportsperson has a lot of fan following, who see them as their idols ...
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Suggestion: the
... career paths. For example, Virat kohli a biggest fan of the of Sachin Tendulkar ...
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...llowed his career path to be a cricketer To conclude, I completely agree with the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, thus, well, for example, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1970.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 371.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30997304582 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9880283652 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525606469003 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 584.1 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.5518790103 49.4020404114 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.538461538 106.682146367 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5384615385 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92307692308 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124059338014 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.048966213788 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0268048248832 0.0667982634062 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0806825774048 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0210741408544 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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