Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhereTo what extend do you agree with this view ?

Although Arts is a symbol of the culture of a society, citizen considered that investing money on art would not be efficient; besides, people believe that this money should spend somewhere else. In my view, I completely disagree to neglect arts and spend the art budgets on other fields but, in many cases, education and the economy are equally important as or perhaps rather essential than art and would have the highest priority if the society struggle with illiteracy and poverty.

Firstly, when the statistics show an increasing rate of illiteracy in a country, then it would be essential that the government consider about spending the budget on education and its related facilities. For example, when a child has not enthusiastic about studying and eager to learn how playing music, then in long term the society has an analphabet man who cannot read the newspaper, but can play instruments, therefore, he would obviously face difficulties in his life, besides, he is not able to solve any of the society's problems.

Secondly, the growth of poverty indicates that government should attend the welfare of people more than arts. For instance, people prefer spending their money on buying food rather than a museum or exhibition tickets, so, in this case, the government focus on art would be a waste of money.
Totally, it means that, first of all, the basic requirements of people should be supplied, and then paying attention to the arts would be helpful or somehow necessary.
In conclusion, an insignificant number of people believe that money should be spent in other fields than art. In my opinion, only in case of society's weakness on meeting the basic needs of people, this view would be acceptable in other case Art is as important as other fields and is the power of a culture.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Suggestion:
...to solve any of the societys problems. Secondly, the growth of poverty indicate...
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'first of all', 'in many cases', 'in my opinion', 'in my view']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.255882352941 0.247107183377 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.123529411765 0.155533422707 79% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0764705882353 0.0946595960268 81% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0676470588235 0.0501214627716 135% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0294117647059 0.0437548338989 67% => OK
Prepositions: 0.141176470588 0.122226691241 116% => OK
Participles: 0.0294117647059 0.0403226058552 73% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.684160668 2.80594681477 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0117647058824 0.0326793684256 36% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0970588235294 0.0861772015684 113% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0382352941176 0.021408717616 179% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0147058823529 0.011925033212 123% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1798.0 1933.35771543 93% => OK
No of words: 303.0 316.048096192 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.93399339934 6.12580529183 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20517956788 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.353135313531 0.374742101984 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.26402640264 0.28420135186 93% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.19801980198 0.203846283523 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.125412541254 0.137316102897 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.684160668 2.80594681477 96% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.037074148 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547854785479 0.56093040696 98% => OK
Word variations: 57.0626465679 60.7387585426 94% => OK
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0891783567 56% => OK
Sentence length: 33.6666666667 20.7743622355 162% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.3019872161 49.517814964 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 199.777777778 127.492653851 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.6666666667 20.7743622355 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 0.814263465372 246% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 60.0693069307 49.1944974215 122% => OK
Elegance: 1.93333333333 1.69124875643 114% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342844173987 0.332605444948 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.155677901527 0.102741220458 152% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0631094339442 0.0668466124924 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.754342218133 0.534860350844 141% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.1311849184 0.148594505496 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.190641214061 0.134430193775 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576336215186 0.0742795772207 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.276504254654 0.324371583561 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0414053383227 0.0638462369009 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235273668183 0.228012699653 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0633253197013 0.058150111329 109% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.68436873747 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.41683366733 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 2.0 5.90881763527 34% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 2.5751503006 272% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 1.9629258517 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 9.0 10.4468937876 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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