Some people think that hard work helps in achieving Financial success while others think it is not the only thing which contributes to financial success Discuss both the views and give your opinion

Certainly, it is true that in this contemporary era, value of hard work is being escalating day by day among people for getting monetary gain. Most of the people introspect that only hard work is crucial where others trust that it may be more reason to attain financial success. According to my perspective, definately it may be more reason for getting financial success.

To start with, hard work is dominating parameter of acquire financial success. These days all work are being done by people in different ways. Like selection of school, colleges, sports, e.t.c. Moreover, they are doing more hard work according to their capacity like work is being done more than 12 hours in a day by them. For example, if anybody would set up his own business at that time he will have to do atleast 24×7 work due to competition in market with different brands and all thing. If he would not do this thing definately he would not able to get good financial gain in his life.

Looking at the other view, there are lots of reason for getting financial gain rather than hard work like, investment, acquiring new skills etc. If we would learn new skills or learn it. It's play a crux role in our life for getting all the thing whatever we want. For instance, if we would invest our money in share market carefully then we would earn more money by share market along with our job. In addition, new skills like investing money on any market or purchasing any new assets. Furthermore, we would get monetary gain very easily.

On a concluding note, undoubtedly hard work is more important than any other thing for getting financial gain yet, we must understand that all things are important in its own place. That's why people should learn new skills as well as do hard work.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, well, for example, for instance, in addition, as well as, it is true, to start with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1454.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66025641026 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40949763015 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509615384615 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0724676909 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.875 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.1875 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192555578675 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0809266505583 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0763526387037 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143581121671 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056642950677 0.056905535591 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.65 8.58950901804 77% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 78.4519038076 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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