Some say that the government should stop supporting the professional sports activities and the cultural performances, and instead begin supporting schools to encourage children to take up sports and arts. What is your opinion?

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Some say that the government should stop supporting the professional sports activities and the cultural performances, and instead begin supporting schools to encourage children to take up sports and arts. What is your opinion?

Every society in general, and every nation in particular has a definite sense of sporting and cultural preferences, and the members of such society or country propagate these tilts through their active interest in the connected events.
First of all, it is true that the governments spend enormous amounts of money on these events. Interestingly, this spending is justified because these events not only entertain people they also generate huge income. However, if a country is least interested in organization of a global sporting event, it can significantly diminish its image before the world.
For example, such events is the Oktoberfest celebrated in Munich city of Bavarian Germany. It is a sixteen to eighteen days long affair, and attracts participants in excess of five million from across the globe. Thus, Oktoberfest has boosted the tourism industry of Germany beyond limits. Furthermore, sporting and cultural events encourage healthy competition between the members of a society. As a result, it aid in preventing the various social evils that may otherwise gnaw at the roots of the civilization.
On the other hand, there is some truth in the argument that governments should support schools so that children can polish their sports and arts skills from an early age. However, the argument that governments should withdraw their support for professional sporting and cultural events and instead support only schools is hard to justify.
To conclude, it can safely be deduced that spending considerable sums of money on sports and cultural events not only nourishes healthy thinking, but also promotes the soft image of the society worldwide. It would rather not to be waste of thought to support sports and arts on school level, since they hold their country's future success.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 411, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'aids'?
Suggestion: aids
...e members of a society. As a result, it aid in preventing the various social evils ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, thus, for example, in general, in particular, as a result, first of all, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1510.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27972027972 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76268032216 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573426573427 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6792646134 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.153846154 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9230769231 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253759605438 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830280678701 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102379536303 0.0667982634062 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135378327908 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118968044939 0.056905535591 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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