It is aruged that daily using computers will bring more negative influences than positive ones on young children. I totally agree with this view not only because the age of them, but also several adverse effects on them. I will elaborate on my views as follows.
To begin with, the age factor comes first. The young children shoud not stare at the screens every day by oculists' advice. They are still at an very early stage of their lives, this behavior will bring many health problems to them, especially to their eyes. Moreover, young children with much lower judgements than elders on the infromation they find in the computers would open a paradox for them. For one thing, maybe they could gain more useful materials like online courses or other interesting and suitable contents for young children. For another thing, by every day using ,they may be attracted by harmful information, violence for instance. It will mislead these young children, even they would pay for their judgeing capabilities with their whole life.
Additionaly, they would be addicted in a virtual world which is totally unnecessary for kids. Admittedly, Children can find various internet information via computer. While in daily using, they would have less time to play with their friends or going out with their parents in real world. Socializing and familiy life can not be repalced by computers. They will have to face the fact. Unfortunatelly, we can find many news that the young children bullying their peers at schools who learned that from the computer games in China.
To conclude, the young children should not use compuer every day due to their age and the side effects,even if it can broaden their views. They should live in a colorful life with love and friendship in the real world, in another world, they should live as children, rather than programmers.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 107, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'oculists'' or 'oculist's'?
Suggestion: oculists'; oculist's
...d not stare at the screens every day by oculists advice. They are still at an very early...
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Line 4, column 142, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...y by oculists advice. They are still at an very early stage of their lives, this b...
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Line 4, column 579, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...n. For another thing, by every day using ,they may be attracted by harmful informa...
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Line 6, column 414, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...e the fact. Unfortunatelly, we can find many news that the young children bullying t...
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Line 6, column 414, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun news seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much news', 'a good deal of news'.
Suggestion: much news; a good deal of news
...e the fact. Unfortunatelly, we can find many news that the young children bullying their ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , even
...ay due to their age and the side effects,even if it can broaden their views. They sho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, still, while, another thing, for instance, for another thing, for one thing, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1549.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9807073955 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4838473854 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585209003215 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.728889936 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0555555556 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2777777778 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.27777777778 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270682778531 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0891064293006 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0868546133061 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176122327497 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046104570637 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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