3)Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Advertisements are an important tool in trade and business market, which can influence people’s choices and preferences when purchasing goods and services. Young children, however, should not be a target for such commercial disputes. I agree with the statement that advertisements directed toward young children should be forbidden. I feel this way for the following reasons.
Firstly, small children are incapable to decide what is right or wrong, therefore, they are influenced in a bad way. They can develop poor eating habit and unhealthy lifestyle since advertisements usually stimulate these without concerns. For example, although nutritionists associations claim for a reduction in quantities of sugar and other noxious products in infant foods, the industry only concerns about how to enhance their profit and achieve more the child public.
Secondly, the advertisements generate consumerist behavior in little children. They are influenced to want to have every toy that is shown on TV or the Internet, because every child they know, at school or other social communities, has that trendy toy. For instance, last year when I went to my nephew’s presentation at school every little girl was with a specific doll even though they were not to play with it. What this means is they require to show that they already have the trendy toy.
Finally, although parents should decide what their children watch on TV and the Internet in addition to monitor them, usually the advertisements arise for children in a hidden manner. For example, the parents allow a child to watch a cartoon on the internet, surprisingly in the middle of the cartoon an advertisement emerges and parents even do not notice it. Moreover, during the infant content or programming, there are vast types of camouflaged publicity.
To sum up, I undoubtedly agree with the statement that advertisements for small children should be prohibited. This is because they are too small to decide what is wrong and they are turned into consumerist people. Furthermore, they should be protected against such an ineffable commercial dispute that unfairly impairs their lives forever.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a bad way" with adverb for "bad"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Message: Did you mean 'showing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: showing
...ith it. What this means is they require to show that they already have the trendy toy. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1827.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.357771261 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98139384306 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551319648094 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6186552958 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.470588235 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0588235294 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.88235294118 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18097074876 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0756584107439 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111221555091 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112674877139 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0866289710446 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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