There is a great debate about whether to use the land for human purposes or to save the land for endangered species. As far as I am concerned, the land can provide us everything we need in order to live, so it is necessary to take advantage of it, rather than saving it to help endangered species, that I think that there are other ways to save this kind of species. I cling to my outlook for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the more developed is the world, the more sacrifices should be made, so infrastructural development should be applied in order to give the people more facilities. As there each time more and more people, we need to take into great account the fact that we can use our empty land space. To clarify my point, let me take my town as an example, I live in Marcabeli which is a little town in Ecuador, it is a beautiful place because of its climate and its kind people, and nowadays there is an increasing number of tourists who visit Marcabeli. Hotels and recreation areas have been already built. I really think that in order to see my town progress, inhabitants need to construct more places which give a pleasure welcoming to tourists, who in otherwise, are going to stop coming. This is how Marcabeli’s people show us how important is to use our land for getting more monetary resources.
Secondly, everyday this world is more overcrowded, so we have to analyze where new people are going to live, some scientists have said that more buildings and parks will be constructed in the coming years. For instance, I was in Quito – the capital of Ecuador-, I could see that there is a lot of empty space and that the civilization is in the downtown, people live so close and do not seize the empty space they have to build. This is because all the important markets are allocated in the downtown. On the other hand, I saw poor people living in the surroundings because they bought a cheaper piece of land there, but in the coming years, every space will be occupied. So, this is also a great example to see that people can make money by constructing in the empty space because it the future people will need a house.
To sum up, I strongly believe that we need to use our land in order to create facilities for the people and to handle future population problems.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 11, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, for instance, i think, kind of, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1919.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48364485981 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57774879424 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478971962617 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.9275859313 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.933333333 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5333333333 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236887804881 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0867112908346 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616347135207 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153862052244 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398877035708 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.0 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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