After completing high school students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university

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After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university.

Currently, a growing controversy arises as to whether students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university. Some people believe that it is useful for students' development, while others hold the opposite ideas. From my perspective, students should be allowed to take a year off.

The primary reason to support my opinion is that taking at least one year off can help students to know what they want to study at the university. To be precise, at this time, they have enough time to engage in various jobs, like to be an accountant or waiter. Experiencing these jobs, they will have a well understanding of the requirement on different works, leading to know what major they are more interesting to learn after back to the university. Take my older brother as an example, before beginning study at the university, he was gaping one year to work as an assistant on lab or teacher in the middle school. After trying this job and back to the university, the education major has been chosen because he would like to teach and play with them. However, if not trying different job, he will waste time on study a major that do not like.

What's more, taking a year off is also helpful to students for hunting a job in the future. As we all know, recently, the majority of companies require interviewers with prolific working experiences. If students have enough time to enrich themselves, their resume background will be becoming more competitive than other job hunters, leading to have more chances to attain the job. Returning to the prior example, because of possessing two working experiences, my brother attained the offer from Apple company after graduating from the university. But, his friends were still found a job until now. Therefore, taking a year off to work in the different positions is of great importance for students.

To sum up, from what has been discussed, we may draw a conclusion that taking almost a year off is beneficial for students.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 41, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...Currently, a growing controversy arises as to whether students should take at least a year of...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...n study a major that do not like. Whats more, taking a year off is also helpful...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, while, as to, at least, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1672.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8323699422 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71527600432 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526011560694 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6267251202 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.5 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.625 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.625 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.438763171021 0.236089414692 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147310882859 0.076458572812 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.165556478681 0.0737576698707 224% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273240552667 0.150856017488 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.170757253743 0.0645574589148 265% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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