Nowadays factories play an important role in improving the economic and social situation of every country. One important issue that the government and employers are facing is which places are more convenient for building factories. Also, People hold different opinions regarding if a factory is built near their community. While some may oppose building factory near their communities, I strongly support it.
On the one hand, some people think founding factories near their communities are harmful. They state that factories cause to air be polluted. Factories pollute the air by fossil fuel emissions. These fossil fuels include carbon dioxide and sulfur dioxide which increase the number of greenhouse gases in the atmosphere resulting in global warming. Air pollution cause health problems including both physical disease and mental problems. Illness like lung disease and heart attack will be increased. Moreover, mental disorders such as stress and depression will be increased. People have environmental concerns too. Air pollution has an effect on plants and animals like humans. Therefore, it is clear why some may disagree that a factory is built near their cities.
On the other hand, despite the above arguments, I still believe that building factory near our communities is useful. Unemployment is one of the important issues that we are facing now. This problem can cause increasing other problems such as crime or addiction. Divorce has high statistics because of the economic problems. By building a factory, many jobs will be supplied and unemployment will reduce. Besides, because factories need to transfer their material and their products, they need developed transportation. So, government force to improve transportation facilities. In addition, our city will become known because the address of the factory is written in a packet of products. Furthermore, factories are required to reduce and prevent their pollution in the air. They can take advantage of advancing facilities to do that. For example, some factories should use filters to air refine. Thus, it is obvious why I think founding factory near my community is beneficial.
In sum, although there are drawbacks to founding factories near communities, I strongly support that because factories cause societies to evolve.
- TPO-28 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
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- TPO-24 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples 60
- TPO-19 - Integrated Writing Task Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements. In response, advertising companies have started using a new tactic, called “buzzing." The advertisers hire people,buzzers,who personally promote (buzz) products to people 75
- TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 123, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'airing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: airing
...armful. They state that factories cause to air be polluted. Factories pollute the air ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, furthermore, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for example, i think, in addition, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48595505618 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82570726997 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553370786517 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.1271364072 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.3333333333 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.1851851852 20.6045352989 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7037037037 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186030719156 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051588026983 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502697535433 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135207836787 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395523920675 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.82 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.67 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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