All people are seeking new experiences during their lives. One of the important factors to discover new knowledge about different aspects of the life is taking risks. Although some people accept risks and dangerous situations more when they are young, some others assert that it is more crucial in older ages. In my opinion, the youth need to take risks more than older people.
First of all, people are more flexible when they are younger. They can adapt themselves with new conditions soon. For example, younger immigrants are more satisfied and can handle hard problems better compared to people who are more than 50 years old. They are fresh and can work harder and think more positive while experienced people are prudent. So, teenagers and the youth are able to tolerate hardships and change their minds or environment.
Moreover, taking risks has some disadvantages in some cases. People in younger ages have more opportunities to rectify their mistakes and learn a lot of new skills from bad experiences. For example, when I came to USA, I was 24 years old and I started to study right after arriving but my friend who is 45 years old could not find a suitable job and staying at home is very hard for her. She worked in our home country and she left her job. Now it is impossible for her to go back to Iran and work again. This experience taught me that in older ages people have to be more careful because they would lose their life and money, if they do not consider every possible consequence.
Finally, some people asserts that when you are older, your experiences are more and this factor help you to take risks sooner. Although I think first part of this statement is correct, I reject the second part. Older men and women prefer to present their knowledge and information to the youth and make them aware about risks. Since they have some dreadful experiences about some risks, they are not interested in repeating them. Therefore, their thoughts can assist others to choose a proper way.
To wrap up, for aforementioned reasons, I claim that juveniles can explore useful things by taking risks better than older people.
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Essay evaluation report
and think more positive
and think more positively
and this factor help you to take risks sooner.
and this factor helps you to take risks sooner.
they are not interested in repeating them.
Description: 'them' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 371 350
No. of Characters: 1725 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.389 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.65 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.363 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 69 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.978 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.524 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.31 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.31 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'for example', 'i think', 'first of all', 'in my opinion', 'in some cases']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.210784313725 0.229887763892 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.164215686275 0.158761421928 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.120098039216 0.0866891130778 139% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0514705882353 0.046263068375 111% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0906862745098 0.0685040099705 132% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0955882352941 0.118717715034 81% => OK
Participles: 0.0196078431373 0.0351676179071 56% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.42164950775 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0367647058824 0.0309702414327 119% => OK
Particles: 0.00245098039216 0.00188951952338 130% => OK
Determiners: 0.0514705882353 0.0887237588012 58% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0171568627451 0.0209618222197 82% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0147058823529 0.0139019557991 106% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2142.0 2387.08602151 90% => OK
No of words: 371.0 408.028673835 91% => OK
Chars per words: 5.77358490566 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.309973045822 0.338922669872 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.194070080863 0.251872472559 77% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.145552560647 0.174417080927 83% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0835579514825 0.112833075102 74% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42164950775 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549865229111 0.524397521467 105% => OK
Word variations: 61.4334455235 59.2087087015 104% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.6666666667 20.5533526081 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6252716719 48.84282405 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 120.699889404 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.5533526081 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.644075263715 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.54480286738 0% => OK
Readability: 37.0736747529 45.7405998639 81% => OK
Elegance: 1.064 1.45489161554 73% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.413470072001 0.300154397459 138% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0786146502871 0.103427244359 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.057808222488 0.0752933317313 77% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.484235645163 0.497263757937 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.177997150891 0.151897553556 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129441577105 0.114077575197 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0920254434595 0.0781384742642 118% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.261310087731 0.336927656856 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0803932158688 0.067059652881 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249180453657 0.210909579961 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0594247555197 0.0618886996521 96% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8870967742 50% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.86379928315 233% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.42114695341 71% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 2.4623655914 284% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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