It goes without saying that in this progressive, modernized world where we live, human beings have been struggling to find ways that lead to their happiness. Finding friends and maintaining friendship is among these ways that will be inductive to humans' happiness. While many people hold the opinion that maintaining friendship with smaller number of people is much more beneficial for them and will lead to their happiness, others stand at the other side of the continuum, believing that having the ability to make many friends easily is more effective in one's happiness. As far as I am concerned, I believe the later opinion and the reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, being capable of making friends easily is a precious gift since it makes communication much easier. It is crystal clear that mankind needs to start a relationship over at every moment of his or her life; thus, being endowed with the ability to make friends as easily as possible is an invaluable skill. Undeniably, people cannot feel a shadow of happiness if they live in isolation, especially when they get out of their permanent habitat and move to somewhere else. Under such a circumstance, maintain a friendship does not help the person, since they have to make new friends in the target environment. A personal experience of mine can drive this fact home. I lived in Iran my whole life and I had a small number of close friends. Having applied and being accepted in the United States, I had to move to a new country in order to pursue my PhD program. Although my family thought, I would have had difficulty making myself to adjust living in a new country, surprisingly I survived. Thanks to my inherent ability of making friends easily, I started going to different clubs in the campus and made a number of friends easily. If I was not able to communicate and make friends easily, I could not live in a new environment far from my family and old friends.
Furthermore, although maintaining friendship can be beneficial, it is not as exciting as making new friends all the time. To put it in other words, if a person is equipped with the talent to start a relationship easily, a new flavor of life will be added to that of his since each person and friend has a special characteristics. What is more, the life will be much more colorful and bright when new people comes to one's life. For example, I have been friends with some of my classmate for more than ten years. Although they are an important part of my life, being with them does not give me a sense of well-being and trigger since we have been talking about our ordinary life every time we meet. Having become friends with some new people in the university cafe, I feel like a new person because each of them has a new story in their life and it seems as if I am experiencing a new journey in my own life. As a result, my routine and dismal life with my old friends has been replaced with a more colorful and exciting one.
In conclusion, having the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I believe that the ability to make friends easily is more beneficial than maintaining a friendship for a long period. Not only do people improve their communication skills, but also they can give their life a new flavor and excitement.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 558, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...any friends easily is more effective in ones happiness. As far as I am concerned, I ...
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Line 2, column 716, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...I lived in Iran my whole life and I had a small number of close friends. Having applied and being...
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Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'characteristic'?
Suggestion: characteristic
...ce each person and friend has a special characteristics. What is more, the life will be much mo...
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Line 3, column 416, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ful and bright when new people comes to ones life. For example, I have been friends ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, thus, well, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, talking about, as a result, in other words, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2735.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 587.0 407.700716846 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65928449744 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9222030514 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72357879807 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449744463373 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 870.3 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.1502844695 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.913043478 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5217391304 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86956521739 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322377092037 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101560458062 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0786211301431 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2197750909 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0331969878914 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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