There is no shortage of debate about weather it is more effective to spend money on universities then to spend them on the education itself of young children. In my opinion i think it is more advantageous to spend money on building a powerful and well structured young generation's education system. I think like that for the reasons that i will explore in the following essay.
First of all, i think spending the money on universities is not necessary to cause the development of the country. The most clue of this state is that many higher educational schools in development country spend the most of the money on construction and infra-structure, like new parking lots, or new food space.This contributions costs a lot of money while they does not increase the educational level of the students.
Secondly, spending money targeting the knowledge of the children can raise a hall country to another level of development.South Korea is a compelling example.In the last years of the 20 century South Korea have made economically a large step forward. Many researches proved that the main reason of this evolution is the investment of the country on the young generation education who gave the country a push to the edge of the development in the field of the new technologies, which present a necessity in our current life .Sam sung is a huge industries in the electronic field and it was created and developed in this country.
In conclusion, according to the above discussion, i think investment's in the young children education is very important and not even compared to the investment's on the universities because the new generation present the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, i think, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1387.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 278.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98920863309 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11424589731 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503597122302 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.6003584229 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.7901351915 48.9658058833 196% => OK
Chars per sentence: 173.375 100.406767564 173% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.75 20.6045352989 169% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.5 5.45110844103 248% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257678816811 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124089779655 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671545873886 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157080873593 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0619530117379 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.4 11.7677419355 165% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 58.1214874552 64% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 10.1575268817 163% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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