I basically do not agree with the idea that art and music have contributed more greatly than science and math. I would like to challenge this statement from the following three perspectives: convenience, fight against diseases, and superiority of science to art.
Firstly, science have put forward and brought about undeniably convenient societies. It has never been possible before the scientific revolution to use disposable plastic bags or straws, which play a pivotal role in today's society, keeping food and drink sanitized. We are also making the best of scientific progress by using air conditioners or cleaning equipments. They have removed troublesome daily chores. Therefore, they are an essential part of our lives. These kinds of convenience could not be achieved with artistic performances.
In addition, science have made it possible for us to protect ourselves from a wide range of diseases. Until recently, an average person could live up to fifty years old. They died mostly from infectious diseases because of the lack of hygiene consciousness. In contrast, there are a few people who live more than a century. This was unthinkable only six or seven decades ago. Advances in the field of science, particularly in medicine, have put our earthly time longer and longer. This contribution to society is much more crucial than that of art and music.
It is sure that art or music have the ability to heal our minds. It provides us with the opportunities to refresh ourselves, and a plentiful amount of works have been created by various artists along their history. It is true that, in a sense, they have contributed to our societies. However, when compared with the achievements of science, they have not had much to do with the human progress. Science has served as a catalyst for social changes for a long time and epoch-making technologies based on science have moved forward our environments over and over again.
For these three reasons, I definitely believe that science and math have much more contribution to the society than art and music, which is opposed to the presented statement.
- kouryaku
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 216, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...by various artists along their history. It is true that, in a sense, they have con...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, therefore, in addition, in contrast, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1774.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11239193084 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86360220556 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587896253602 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.683506801 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.4761904762 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5238095238 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373723096506 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102244041049 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125851600422 0.0737576698707 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241314271054 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136570286979 0.0645574589148 212% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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