When it comes to the issue the importance of a concert, some people prefer to go to the concert instead of watching it in the television. However, others have the opposite view and think that going to the concert is costly and time-consuming. As far as I am concerned, the former point carries more weight. I take this position on account for the following reasons.
First and the most important reason is that presence in the live concert is more delighted than watching it from the television. In fact, you have to sit on the sofa and stare at the television screen for some hours to watch a concert, so there is nothing that delighted you. Nonetheless, the live concert put audiences in special intimacy atmosphere that people can dance, sing, and laugh. All people come the concert have the one aim, to have joy time as much as possible, so you can see there many happy people, which affects your spirit positively. Therefore, the enjoyment you gain from the live concert can not be compared with what you acquire when you watch it on the television.
A further point we must consider you can make more friends in the live concert, which is impossible by watching the concert on the television. I think that there is not a better example than myself when I was studying in the university. At that time, I had a close friend who worked in a famous concert hall at California. On my birthday, he gave me a ticket of concerts, which was held once per year, as my birthday gift. Although I never went to any concert, I was curious to experience this environment. Eventually, I went to the concert with my friend, we were dancing, singing with others, making new friends, and also I became familiar with my ideal girl, who now is my wife. SO, the live concert provides a suitable condition that people can broke their ice and communicate with each others easily.
Apart from points I made above, opponents claim that you have to spend money for buying ticket and other charges, while staying at home and watch the concert with their family on the television does not impose any costs on them. It is quite normal for gaining some thing you have to pay its costs, and watching the live concert is nor exception. Indeed, I believe what you gain in a live concert is worthy to pay for it.
All above evidence supports that when you go to the concert, you can gain more enjoyments make more friends. Of course, as an English proverb goes “a coin has two sides”; therefore, those who take the opposite view are partly reasonable that for going to a concert you have spend time and money, while television allows you to watch it free. Nevertheless, I strongly believe that its profits outweigh dangerous.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'something'?
Suggestion: something
...on them. It is quite normal for gaining some thing you have to pay its costs, and watching...
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Line 9, column 285, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'spent'.
Suggestion: spent
...le that for going to a concert you have spend time and money, while television allows...
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Line 9, column 347, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'frees'?
Suggestion: frees
...while television allows you to watch it free. Nevertheless, I strongly believe that ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'nevertheless', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'apart from', 'i think', 'in fact', 'of course']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.2 0.229887763892 87% => OK
Verbs: 0.163302752294 0.158761421928 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0752293577982 0.0866891130778 87% => OK
Adverbs: 0.051376146789 0.046263068375 111% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0899082568807 0.0685040099705 131% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.111926605505 0.118717715034 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0293577981651 0.0351676179071 83% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.5413142455 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0293577981651 0.0309702414327 95% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.100917431193 0.0887237588012 114% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0128440366972 0.0209618222197 61% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0238532110092 0.0139019557991 172% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2718.0 2387.08602151 114% => OK
No of words: 482.0 408.028673835 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.63900414938 5.86048508987 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.302904564315 0.338922669872 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.232365145228 0.251872472559 92% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.147302904564 0.174417080927 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0809128630705 0.112833075102 72% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5413142455 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489626556017 0.524397521467 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 56.4794352833 59.2087087015 95% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.9090909091 20.5533526081 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0033628127 48.84282405 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.545454545 120.699889404 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9090909091 20.5533526081 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.590909090909 0.644075263715 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 45.1456054319 45.7405998639 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.12048192771 1.45489161554 77% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350733114351 0.300154397459 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.112900561338 0.103427244359 109% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0833001377884 0.0752933317313 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.511034412255 0.497263757937 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.154265630845 0.151897553556 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14188163466 0.114077575197 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0763936617563 0.0781384742642 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.410954162113 0.336927656856 122% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0890491284972 0.067059652881 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250405353304 0.210909579961 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508886349713 0.0618886996521 82% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8870967742 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.