In the 21st century, the fierce discussion on gender issues is continuously uprising, and the education method of some traditional single-gender schools is also pushed to be controversial. I believe that it is a mistake to give students education separately by their birth sex. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in this essay.
To begin with, I would like to say that educate both girls and boys in the same environment promotes their perspective of gender equality. I think it would be fair to say that in most cases, providing education equally to all children despite what birth sex they will help to minimise stereotypical gender perception and encourage children to develop themselves freely without discouragements from traditional gender regulation. For example, girls should also be encouraged to be strengthful and brave, although tradition values those traits as "masculine"; boys should also be allowed to express their sensual and tender personalities. My personal experience was a compelling illustration of this. I can recall the time when I was in elementary school. Our headmaster especially emphasised gender equality and unisexual education-- we were encouraged to wear as free as we want, be told to participate in activities despite gender labels. Even though six years do not take a large proportion in our education period, we were still rooted in a progressive recognition of equality. We are still proud of the value our elementary brought us until today.
Furthermore, I am of the opinion that creating more chances to contact and communicate with the gender different from children themselves contributes to more progressive mutual respect between sex. It is part of human nature for most cisgenders to have the desire to communicate and build a connection with another gender. Girls and boys participating in an identical education contribute to establishing a clear understand of another sex and learning respect between them mentally and physically. Girls and boys will understand each other by cooperating during games or doing a group project, and the social manners they learnt into practice with teachers' guidance. For instance, a long-term observation report I have read indicated that teenagers who had been encouraged to game and talk with kids of the opposite sex during their kindergarten and elementary school period do better on maintaining both heterosexual friendship and love-relationship. In addition to the intersocial relationship, appearance shaming and menstruation shaming, the two most frequently seen problems among teenagers were observed to have an apparent connection with the sex education and social manner training they had received during their childhood.
In conclusion, I strongly feel it is critically important to set an educational environment where different sex interact. This is because more interactions promote the perspective of equality when two sex have more chances to understand each other better, and practical communication is the foundation for students to build a proper sexual perception.
- TPO 64 integrated 80
- After completing high school students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university 70
- TPO 54 Integrated Writing Task 77
- TPO 63 73
- tpo 66 Summarize the points made in the lecture being sure to explain how they cast doubt on the specific methods proposed in the reading passage 100
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, still, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in most cases, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 8.0752688172 334% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2623.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47599164927 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28689310779 2.67179642975 123% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544885177453 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 823.5 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.9439781954 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.052631579 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2105263158 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.31578947368 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0962238889462 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0321155323711 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0331235053318 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0510472750206 0.150856017488 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371588758679 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 86.8835125448 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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