Nowadays, education has become the top concern of modern citizens, recently, there is a heated debate on whether children should play with toys or use the computer. Some people claim that it does not matter if they use a lot of technology, as for me, I believe that kids should play with simple toys or go outside instead of staying at home playing video games.
Firstly, playing with some toys can increase their attention span. To be specific, those toys are designed very simple and handy, kids can easily know how to control them instead of being taught by adults, they are more confident when playing it. Also, some toys like puzzles, building blocks, and balls are likely intriguing to their interests and they are willing to focus on the game. Take my sister Lucy for example, when she was 6 years old, her parents gave her a puzzle as a birthday present. Ever since, she was obsessed with it, because she needed to find every piece on her own, and this gave her fulfillment once she completed the whole picture. Lucy always spent hours even a day playing it, and this greatly increased her attention span, leading to better academic performance in the further. So when she went to high school, Lucy could focus on a problem for a very long time until she solved it. Thus, I am convinced that children should play with some toys.
Furthermore, young pupils can make a variety of new friends by playing outside. To be exact, in this way, kids have the chance to know how to communicate with others. Some kids are usually immature to understand that they are not the center of the world. Therefore, playing outside with their friend and involving in team activities like playing football and finishing something together will give them the experience such as paying attention to other kids, talking with them face-to-face, and making compromises to achieve any common goal. On the contrary, if they just stay at home, playing video games, what they are facing is only a screen and well-designed characters. In this way, kids will live in a virtual world, and it makes them difficult to understand the real reactions and interactions in reality. In a word, I state that kids need to play outside.
In conclusion, from what has been discussed above, I still maintain that children should play with simpler toys or play outside with friends.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, still, therefore, thus, well, as for, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1948.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78624078624 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45246509789 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562653562654 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6471744538 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.222222222 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6111111111 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38888888889 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284200374514 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0942037503579 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719527318509 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205612375642 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518721907801 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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