In the last few decades, with the advancement of the contemporary world, competition among human beings has been drastically escalated. On that ground, people might have to compete against their dear once in the realm of competition. In this regard, many people contend that competition between friends could diminish their relationship. On the other side, there is a group of people who consider it as an exaggeration and think in the opposite manner. Certainly, from my vantage point, the latter view contains more weight. For the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons and examples justifying my stance.
The first exquisite reason to be mentioned is that even though competing with friends for the same target, friendship cannot be destroyed between two people. This is because friendship is a strong emotional connection between individuals. Indeed it does not damage due to certain external factors such as competition between friends. In fact, it helps in strengthening the relationship between the two. To shed more light on this, my life’s example is a compelling example for what has been elaborated above. In 2015, I and my close friend were preparing for an international exam in order to get admission to dental school in the United States of America. In order to prepare well for the exam, we used to discuss many topics together for long hours. Not only this but also we used to nudge each other to be consistent in studies in hard times. Apparently, rendering mutual help augmented our frequency of contact which made our friendship, even more, stronger than earlier. Ultimately, it is judicious to say that competing with friends for the same goal does not lead to any harm to their friendship.
Another noteworthy point is that competition between close friends can be very beneficial to their personal as well as academic growth even though many people can not see through it. To be more specific, most of the time, people get motivated by seeing their friends and relatives are growing in a particular field which would further enforce people to follow their friends and relatives footsteps in order to accomplish success in their own lives. To exemplify, in reality, I have neither dreamt for higher education nor to pursue my master in abroad, however, my close friend who went to Canada for her masters’, stimulated my dreams to study like her in Canada. Therefore, I started preparing for documentations for the very next semester and took admission to the same college. Hence, it is reasonable to say friendship is not solely a relation between two people but it contributes many benefits to them even though in a time of competition.
To recapitulate, from contemplating all remarks, though many people may not agree with my viewpoint, I strongly believe that competition among pupils would foster their personal growth, and it can make the relationship, even more, stronger than ever.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 240, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Indeed,
...otional connection between individuals. Indeed it does not damage due to certain exter...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, hence, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, in fact, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2473.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10950413223 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85093048389 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54132231405 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 752.4 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 4.94265232975 303% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0368069605 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.409090909 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132843638348 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0409022346407 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0316246346688 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0902834230603 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0198643586648 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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