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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The extended family grandparents cousins aunts and uncles is less important now than it was in the past

Nowadays, family relationships play a vital role in developing a great community and country. Some people believe that family is today more important than before. I, personally, on the other hand, think that this was more crucial in the past when compared to now. I feel this way because of two significant reasons which I will put forth in the following paragraphs.

First of all, individuals are busy now than the past. People have a lot to do and they have no additional time to allocate to the extended family. My personal example is a good illustration of this concept. Now, I have two jobs overwhelming me so much that I can put little or no time aside to spend with my grandparents or cousins and uncles. As a result, the extended family becomes less serious for me and those who are around me. This is true for other persons as well. I think most people are so steeped in their occupations or studies that they forget even what their life is about. This example shows that because of the structure of today’s difficult situation to live, many men pay less attention to their close families rather than the old days. Had they not overwhelmed by so many factors we face nowadays, they could have been able to pay a lot more attention to their extended kin.

Last but not least, as technology enhances and grows, we are absorbed by other subjects surrounding us. Today, we have access to many state of the art gadgets and tools making life easier for us. This kind of objects take our time and energy so much that we become accustom to them. Therefore, we allot less time for our grandparents or grandmothers and so on. But, in the past people had less distractions and technological devices keeping them engaged so much than today. For instance, kids and teenagers play myriads of computer games a lot in today’s world than the past or they go to different extracurricular classes to learn how to play a new musical instrument giving them less opportunity to allocate to their elders in the family. If they hadn’t distracted by so many tech instruments, they could have spent more time and energy with their extended family today.

To put it all in a nutshell, taking all the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I am of opinion that family elders were more essential in the past compared to today. Not only are people preoccupied by different kinds of jobs in today’s circumstances, but also the inevitable progress made in the industrial era takes a lot of their resources away.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 130, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun state seems to be countable; consider using: 'many states'.
Suggestion: many states
...urrounding us. Today, we have access to many state of the art gadgets and tools making lif...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 135, Rule ID: STATE_OF_THE_ART[1]
Message: Did you mean 'state-of-the-art'?
Suggestion: state-of-the-art
...nding us. Today, we have access to many state of the art gadgets and tools making life easier fo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 390, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun distractions is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... and so on. But, in the past people had less distractions and technological devices ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, i think, kind of, as a result, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2079.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.725 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71928280378 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515909090909 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5400790144 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77272727273 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183142065119 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560551427937 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485523461296 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110915003061 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481994241948 0.0645574589148 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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