Development’s orientation has been a burning global issue. Some governors suggest that it is crucial for the country to subsidize art instead of athletics. Personally, I strongly agree with this suggestion.
On one hand, what I put in my priority is the country’s development. The fact is that sponsoring art creates chances for national art to cross over the country boundary. As a result, it has a tendency to be in the vision of foreign people. Therefore, there is a likelihood that the country's fame expands over the world. It is the essence of a flourishing country. More importantly, when funded by governments, it is possible for the professions in the art field to become more attracting in the mind of the youth. For this reason, young people tend to try their best to take place in these jobs. It follows that more talents are certain to exist in the art area. Hence, it instigates the country to acquire a fast development pace. Beyond any doubt, financing art encourages the country to step into a prosperous age.
On the other hand, it is claimed that the amount of money funded into art is extremely huge. Consequently, the recession is inevitable. However, it is just applicable to a minority. In fact, governments always carefully determine many problems that are likely to happen. For this reason, the national budget is bound to be used in an effective direction. In addition, when supported by money, the artists are certain to gain a strong motivation. Successively, they have an inclination to dedicate themselves to the artic job that they do. Subsequently, it stands a golden chance for art to have a better quality of products, lots of masterpieces are highly likely to be generated. As a result, activities such as trading or exhibiting are apt to walk into the period of enormous successes. In that case, the economy of the country has a tendency to reach a maximal velocity of growing. By and large, the claim that putting belief into art causes the country to fall down is unrealistic.
In summary, for all the mentioned above, spending money on art’s growth is a compelling topic. It is strongly advised that governors should take my writing into great consideration to guideline an appropriate policy on development’s orientation.
- TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task 66
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in sponsoring arts than in athletics (like state Olympics team). 70
- TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans 66
- TPO-25 - Integrated Writing Task 61
- TPO 39 - integrated writing 3
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, hence, however, so, therefore, in addition, in fact, in summary, such as, as a result, by and large, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 13.8261648746 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1910.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1161994031 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547120418848 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.8365112089 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.4615384615 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6923076923 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07692307692 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160000966116 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0378401186243 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440216555522 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0921536675163 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0111760049939 0.0645574589148 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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