It goes without saying that in this complicated and up-to-the-date era in which we live in, all human beings are always striving to increase their salary to release their mind form the issues regarding financial problems. Whereas some individuals debate that increasing the revenue of professors worked in universities do not improve the quality of education, on the other side of the continuum, stand others, believing that this phenomenon actually plays a key role in the professors' lives. As far as I am concerned, I categorically concur with this mental attitude that the quality of education will increase if the professors earn more money. In the ensuing essay, my perspective will be substantiated by underlying reasons.
To begin with, due to the fact that the rate of financial problems has increased during the past few years, therefore, all human beings' mind are involved in these problems. Thus, if universities pay more money to their professors and increase their revenues, the professor’s minds will not preoccupy with those problems. Under this circumstance, the concentration of professors will enhance which dramatically influences the improvement of education quality. An example can shed some light on this subject. My father was a distinguished professor at the University of Melbourne. In a period of time, due to his low income, we had lots of difficulties in our life. One day, he talked to the head of the engineering department and the chancellor confirmed that he would increase my father's salary. This event really persuaded my father to release his mind from the economic problems and focus more on teaching and writing different proposals for the industry.
Moreover, by increasing the salary of professors, universities encourage them more to participate in several industrial projects and attract more talented students to the university. Under such a situation, the quality of education due to the attraction of more talented students will improve, revenues of universities will surprisingly increase, and universities can obtain a great reputation among other universities. An example can drive this notion home. In the aforementioned example, my father could eventually get a huge project from Tesla Company which led to increasing the reputation of that university. Subsequently, he became familiar with a large number of talented individuals in that environment. This actually helps him to encourage more students to continue their education in my father's university which brought a huge budget to the university.
In sum, taking into account the aforementioned reasons and examples, I am of opinion that increasing the salaries of the professors will obviously enhance the quality of education. This is because they do not have any economic problem to think about it and lose their concentrations, and also universities find great fame among other universities.
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- TPO 33 Integrated Writing Task 45
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 177, Rule ID: FROM_FORM[4]
Message: Did you mean 'from'?
Suggestion: from
...ease their salary to release their mind form the issues regarding financial problems...
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Line 1, column 729, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...be substantiated by underlying reasons. To begin with, due to the fact that the ...
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Line 3, column 590, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...or at the University of Melbourne. In a period of time, due to his low income, we had lots of ...
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Line 5, column 653, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
.... Subsequently, he became familiar with a large number of talented individuals in that environmen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, if, moreover, really, regarding, so, therefore, thus, whereas, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2462.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42290748899 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18801840519 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519823788546 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 788.4 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.3994107715 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.1 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15283485491 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0488952014349 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0406779981649 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107277377299 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0201926062268 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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