Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Improving schools is the most important factor in the successful development of a country

Schools may be important, but I do not think it is the most important factor for the future of our country. I think that there are two more things that are very important for our country. One thing, is our government. My next thing is our parents.

I think that the government is more important than the school for the development of our country. I think this because the government creates laws and does most of the things for my country. Without the government constantly making changes, our country would have many flaws. The government also keeps us safe, so without the government, schools would have no effect.

Secondly, I think that parents are a key to the future of the country. I think this, because parents are one of the main things that shape a person. If the parent is a bad influence, the child would also be a very bad person. Even without school, our parents could teach our kids, things such as being kind to people or manners.

I think that our government and parents are the key to the development of our country. Without these two things, schools would be nothing but teaching us something that would not be useful in the future.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, i think, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 52.1666666667 27% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 956.0 1977.66487455 48% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 207.0 407.700716846 51% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61835748792 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79308509922 4.48103885553 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46248901153 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 212.727598566 45% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458937198068 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 273.6 618.680645161 44% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.5341286658 48.9658058833 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.2857142857 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7857142857 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139170681861 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0642426952876 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0794387853825 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0992603064037 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0480723989693 0.0645574589148 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 58.1214874552 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 10.1575268817 51% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.92 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 5.93 8.01818996416 74% => OK
difficult_words: 21.0 86.8835125448 24% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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