Even though there is a widely held notion that being expert in a specific subject can guarantee the future academic success for people, I subscribe to the view that having a wide range of knowledge and experience is more beneficial. My reasons for supporting this hypothesis are organized as follows.
First of all, being specialized in a single subject will probably lead to having a single career for a lifetime; In my opinion, it can be boring or even frustrating to have a specific vocation for a long time and performing some repetitious tasks on a daily basis. On the other hand, individuals who have different abilities often work in different cultures and have a more exciting life due to the diversity of their accomplishments.
Furthermore, not only will not having broad expertise restrict job opportunities for individuals, but it provides them with numerous fields which they can pursue based on their preference as well. The reason is that it is not necessary to be an expert to start a profession. Conversely, I believe that people can begin a job as a junior, and subsequently, they could become more and more senior in their position. Instead, in the beginning, they would analyze and choose their career with wisdom, being familiar with an immense range of areas with which they are familiar.
Finally, people must be cautious about the issue that their desires and preferences might change when they become older, and as a result, their current vocation might not satisfy them. In this case, if they had a narrow but deep knowledge and expertise in a particular area, they would be confined to their profession. However, having a general academic knowledge would alleviate the pain of switching one's vocation when they decide to move on and change their discipline. For example, I was working several years in the field of mobile communication after my graduation from university. However, since I predicted that this area would not correspond to my abilities, I changed my work and went to another company in the field of Artificial Intelligence. The transition happened abruptly due to my experience in Artificial Intelligence area, which I gained through my side studies when I was a student.
With all being said, I draw a conclusion that it would be more appropriate to have experience and academic background in several fields because that would make us choose our career more intelligently, and also, we could shift our directions more easily whenever we find such a shift necessary.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 32, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...ents. Furthermore, not only will not having broad expertise restrict job opportunit...
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Line 7, column 403, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...e would alleviate the pain of switching ones vocation when they decide to move on an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, so, well, for example, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2104.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03349282297 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90437322073 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514354066986 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 672.3 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.1192888255 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.266666667 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8666666667 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.8 5.45110844103 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128855717411 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0428560911387 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494970514559 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0807999859605 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0360787084967 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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