Some people think it is better to have in-depth knowledge in one subject because it is more useful and time-saving as worrying that those who have a broad knowledge of many subjects are lack understanding of each subject. However, I strongly believe that it is much better to possess a wide range of knowledge in various fields for several reasons.
To begin with, a broad knowledge of many subjects can truly make you succeed because it creates an optimal condition to get a decent job. In our society, it has become extremely difficult for individuals to get a good job without a wide range of knowledge in many different academic areas. As there are thousands of rivals in the competitive job market, possessing various skillsets is tremendously required for one to succeed. By being equipped with knowledge in different parts of each academic subject, one can attain diverse experiences and qualifications for the work. For example, my sister, whose major is electrical engineering, used to participate in a literature club when she was in college. People around her advised her that the literature club might not be helpful for her future, but she kept engaging in that club until she was graduated because she was interested in writing and reading. However, at a job interview of the electrical engineering related company, the interviewer wanted to hire a person who is familiar with literature and poem since he thought comprehending reading materials can be helpful to apply technology in society. Consequently, she got a job, found that engaging in a broader field of study in university during the club activity helped her to get an excellent job.
On top of that, people need new experiences and stimuli to make themselves focus on their main tasks and improve their ability. By learning different subjects that people have not been exposed to, they can not only refresh themselves but also feel accomplishments. Let me tell you about what happens when people accept ideas from many academic subjects. If you are working at a lab experimenting with human behaviors, you may get sick and tired of observing people’s actions and of yourselves trying to analysis every behavior of random people unintentionally. Then, you need some distractions to forget about your job and enjoy your life even more than now. Finally, you start to take a lecture about bio-chemistry and you feel novelty. Thanks to studying another subject, you come up with the idea to attempt interdisciplinary studying, and your reputation will be striking in your academic field. Get yourself fulfilling with something else. It will become your valuable assets.
To sum up, I admit people who specialize in one particular subject can have deep knowledge and a profound understanding of that subject. However, they, sometimes, need to be taught a broad knowledge of another field to success and to improve themselves.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. 70
- Cars have made a greater impact on society than airplanes 90
- Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? 70
- People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 66
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 260, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ob without a wide range of knowledge in many different academic areas. As there are thousands ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, however, if, may, so, then, for example, to begin with, to sum up, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2434.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10272536688 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96878589385 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536687631027 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 774.9 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4327017101 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.904761905 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7142857143 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47619047619 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252857398324 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0785615261106 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747792574888 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180625638736 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519314475258 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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