Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Crucial events happen every moment in a single corner of the world. Thanks to Internet access, people can obtain information in a short time by surfing online. Some people may argue that it is insignificant to get to know the news all over the world, while I firmly believe that gaining a basic understanding of international events is useful to individuals. I consider this way based on several reasons which I will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, knowing global news helps us to prevent negative events from occurring. Even though events from other countries seem nothing to do with us at the time they happen, they may occur in our life someday in the future. If the event causes terrible effects, by exploring it, people can avoid it from happening around them. For instance, a tragedy just occurred in South Korea. Hundreds of young people were killed in the accident of pushing and stepping on to other people in an extremely crowded festival activity. After being aware of this disaster, the government of our country implemented strict instructions for citizens to follow on large and crowded occasions. Furthermore, people will pay more attention when they attend these kinds of places. All of these adjustments prevent similar tragedies from happening again. It is clear to see from this example that understanding global news is helpful for us to reflect and adjust ourselves, avoiding disasters from happening.
In addition, attaining basic knowledge of incidents around the world provides us with topics to discuss with others. This allows people to gain opportunities to make new friends or strengthen relationships with current acquaintances. Drawing from my own experience, I attended a business social occasion, and the people there could have tremendous influences on the profits of our company. At the event, two important customers came to me, and talked to me about a piece of big international news that just happened a few days ago. Fortunately, since I had always paid attention to global news, we had a great conversation, thereby leaving them a good impression and further benefiting our cooperation. I am sure that if I had not focused on events happening all over the world, I could not have had such a successful conversation with them.
To sum up, I am of the opinion that it is essential for individuals to stay focused on news occurring in the world. This is because knowing global affairs not only allows people to avoid negative events from happening again, but also creates topics for us to discuss with others.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 404, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he profits of our company. At the event, two important customers came to me, and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, then, while, for instance, in addition, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2153.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04215456674 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84903637486 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564402810304 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3438396295 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.523809524 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.80952380952 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182609504077 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0546293525326 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465311580327 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111820861144 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0191508064104 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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