Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

In contemporary society, with the rapid development of technology, especially the convenient access to the Internet, people have the capacity to finish everything with just a click. Therefore, many people assert that the government should spend more resources on the improvement of the Internet network. However, I, on the contrary, contend that the authority concerned should spend much more effort and money on public transportation for the following reasons, including facilitating a sound job market and cutting back up the pollution.
To commence with, with the urbanization and higher tendency of getting a well-paid job, more people choose to flock into the city to seize the chance of getting a satisfactory job. Under the circumstances, when much more people all live near the metropolitan, the traffic there will be even congested than ever before and a higher risk of car accidents. The increasing death toll caused by traffic jams arises simultaneously. People in the past may simply spend one hour a day commuting from their home to the work field. But in the recent state, most people all indicate that they have spent at least two times the commuting hour than ever before. This long-waiting and exhausting queueing may keep worsening if the new public transportation hasn't been renovated greatly.
To keep at a steady pace of becoming an international city for the good job market not only for the local citizens and the foreigners, it is also undoubted that the renovated and advanced improvement should be done on the transportation system.
Besides, we people should not neglect the potential aftermath that the increasing population near the city may occur. If public transportation is well-available for a range of citizens, more people will have no option but to drive their private car. If the situation, sadly, happens, deteriorating air pollution could be foreseen right away. People may then have a soaring risk of getting lung-related diseases, allergic and other innumerable potential negative consequences. What's more, we should also keep in mind that once more private are working during the weekday, this will lead to the consequence of urban island. Urban island, which may become more detrimental to human society and the environment because of the combination of the global warming, may gradually and significantly affect both the living condition of the human and the flora and fauna with unexpected results.
Even though the Internet does make the lives of humans convenient unprecedentedly. But if we neglect that we are actually in an outdated system of public transportation, we seem to haven't made huge progress in human civilization. Like the Roman Empire, it is just its advanced scheduled transportation system that makes them have the chance to predominate at that time.
In conclusion, by forcing the government to put more emphasis on the improvement of public transportation, the whole country can create a better atmosphere for the work field and reduce the potential negative consequence of crowded traffic.

Votes
Average: 9 (1 vote)
Essay Categories
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 743, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
...sening if the new public transportation hasnt been renovated greatly. To keep at a s...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 476, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...erable potential negative consequences. Whats more, we should also keep in mind that ...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 884, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lora and fauna with unexpected results. Even though the Internet does make the lives of hum...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 181, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...em of public transportation, we seem to havent made huge progress in human civilizatio...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, at least, in conclusion, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 8.0752688172 310% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2575.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 487.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28747433265 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0684516898 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537987679671 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 804.6 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7835741806 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.75 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.35 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194879513009 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561930548815 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537331803994 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110480999809 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680545696175 0.0645574589148 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.