Nowadays people spend a huge amount of their time at work so the job became an inseparable part of their lives. I believe the income of an occupation is not necessarily the most valuable feature of it. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, a boring job with a high salary can not bring satisfaction in a long run. We all have experienced that when we enjoy something, the effort put on that work doesn't look too much. In contrast, doing things which are not interesting will make us exhausted and even after finishing them, there would be no satisfaction. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Our university forces students to take an internship course which allows them to prepare themselves for the real job opportunities in the future and improve their resumes. I had several choices in front of me and all them were good in different aspects. I narrowed down my options to two. One of them was a big company that offered a high wage while the other one paid much less but what they did there was very intriguing for me. After talking with my seniors, I decided to pick the second one and I really was satisfied with that because doing such an exciting job gave me self-confidence and made me feel valuable.
Secondly, I believe more salary requires more effort which yields to more working hours. In my perspective there are a lot of facets of our lives which an occupation can't fulfill them. We work to have a better life but excessive attempt to earn more money is in fact wasting the valuable gift of life. For instance, I have a friend named Ali who is a doctor and works in double shifts everyday. He doesn't give himself a break and he is always busy. Even though he is rich, he isn't satisfied with his life and thinks he will find true happiness in an extra these shifts. On the other hand I have another pal who is also a physician but she has a whole life beside her occupation. She goes to gym, watch movies, and travels and still is a famous doctor in the city. Obviously she doesn't earn as much as Ali but in my point of view she is a more successful person than Ali because she doesn't define herself with the income and tries to experience other aspects of life.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that wage is not the most important characteristic of a job. This is because I think being happy with a job and growing different parts of personality alongside the job are more essential than the earning.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, still, while, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2044.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45315904139 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54899912473 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542483660131 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5295756558 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.8695652174 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9565217391 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4347826087 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117754878253 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0324729864211 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387800440297 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0877642060424 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0476580907432 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.53 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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