Today, people enjoy many benefits from the Internet by connecting themselves online. Despite the fact that the Internet has some negative effects for our society, it is undeniable that prosper of Internet have given enormous positive effects to peoples’ life. I will elaborate my assertion with two reasons which will be stated in a following essay.
To begin with, the Internet stimulated emerging of intercontinental trades. Unlike the past, viewing, buying and selling products to people who live other side of the globe became convenient thanks to the Internet. The Internet also enable the real-time checking of trading ad delivering process which is extremely satisfying for both seller and consumer. For example, past generations in Korea could hardly buy the nutritional supplements due to a lack of those products in Korea. Only few people who had enough wealth to buy foreign groceries and product could take supplements such as multivitamins. However, the widespread use of the Internet helped people to get their tablets easier than before. For example, by using websites such as iHerb, my family can intake multivitamin serums from Germany and Omega-3 which is made out of Nordic salmon oil. Thus, my sister orders specific spices such as wasabi of Fukuoka of Japan and Mara souce from Shanghai time to time. People in my county now can try numerous items from all around the world by using internet.
Secondly, the Internet provided a chance to be educated to many disadvantaged people of the world. With an ability to connect people regardless of time and region, the Internet helped people to get educated through online classes. Many people took this chance and developed their life into better positions. For example, there was a social campaign which was conducted by Korean government to help people in their 60s to 80s, especially who have suffered the Korean war during their childhoods. Due to absence of education to read and write the Hangeul (Korean alphabet), they barely got a regular job until today. Therefore, the government helped them by installing personal computers in their houses and starting online classes by Zoom program because most students of that class was too old to go to school without wheelchairs. However, the effectivity and results of the lecture was amazing. Old ladies from those classes now annually open their poem exhibitions to encourage their peers to learn how to read and write.
In conclusion, with worldwide use of the Internet, people got many positive effects such as international shopping and continuing studies through online classes. Therefore, I insist that the Internet affects people in positive ways overall.
- Drivers should pay an additional fee for driving where there is the greatest amount of traffic 63
- Movies and television strongly influence the way people behave Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer 73
- My lifestyle is easier and more comfortable than the one my grandparent experienced when they were young 3
- Sometimes it is better to be dishonest 70
- People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment and not enough on more serious duties and obligations Use your specific reasons and examples to support your answer 89
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 302, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... of trading ad delivering process which is extremely satisfying for both seller and consumer. For examp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2254.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21759259259 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68176266558 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576388888889 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7406080327 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.454545455 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6363636364 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22727272727 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173244379537 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0557563506666 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497632692446 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129418723929 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0501169696278 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 86.8835125448 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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