Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, the job has been playing a crucial role in human lives. The importance of a successful and lucrative job is not a secret for anyone. Identifying a perfect and successful job in the past was easier has caused the heated debate among the academicians. The vast majority of experts believe it was more difficult because there were not any technologies or experts to analyze or predict the future. Nevertheless, some take the opposite view and rejects their reasons. I firmly concur with the latter group and in the following paragraphs, I will elaborate cogently my points of view.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that according to the sentence that necessity is the mother of the invention, in those days the country was encountered with a lack of many goods. It is axiomatic that every small spark of economical creativity helps the entrepreneur to be successful in the future. In other words, the demands were certainly more than supply hence, it is crystal clear, by a little more thinking they could find easily a suitable career. To clarify the viewpoint, it was like the wide land that could accommodate more residents
Another equally noteworthy point in corroborating my stance is that the competition was not very strong like nowadays. It advocates more people to be a success in their careers. According to Darwin's theory, the more and more competition, the more and the more elimination. Therefore, had been incredibly competition, a few people would have welcomed the new goods. For instance, if there are three grocery stores in one street their earning became less while if there were one store, it could make more money.
In brief, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that as there were lass competition and also, more need the individuals could have a better future in comparison to this era. Besides, the population was far less compared to now so they feel more secure about the future of their job. However, it was the story in the nutshell, there are more reasons which support my idea.
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...are more reasons which support my idea.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, while, for instance, in brief, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9367816092 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77625321487 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563218390805 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8901003259 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.058823529 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4705882353 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82352941176 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147209530385 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0508135036151 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0470664634673 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0930326558576 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504795920907 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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