Habits of people is a crucial part of their lives. The amount of enjoyment ballances their tiredness and give them enough energy to do their tasks. But more than usuall is can hurt them. From my point of view, I posit that extra enjoyment-doing tasks is not not good and I disagree with the passage discussion. In the passage below I attempt to address my points.
First, It postpones learning procedure. Extera enjoyment cause people to have fewer time to study. Actually it wastes their time. For instance, ten years ago, when I was in elementary school I spend much time with my friend. My daily plan was to eat lunch after school, then whatching TV and finally go out untill late. Because of huge number of hours that I spent on enjoyment, I did not have enough time for exam preparation. So In the final exam questions were unfamiliar for me and I finally failed. There for extra enjyment delayed my process of learning.
In addition, extera time on enjoyment harms the healthiness of people. It decreases eagerness and enthusiastic an strengthen laziness that prevent people to do sport or any activity that help to be healthy. For istance, last nigth I saw a ducumentary in time management. The program measured the influence of sport in different features like age and freshness. At the end It has been shown that more hour in sport make people to feel freshness and increase lifeexpectancy. So that documentary show me the influence of time management in doing sport on healthiness.
Finally, extra enjoyment often damage job occupation. People should have enough experience to find job. but spending more hour on enjoyment never let people to gather enough experience from the job that they like. For instance, last week my government released unemployment rate. last month my country recieved plenty of immigrant and new statistics was unexpected. The government announced that the main reason in lack of experience and explaines that those immigrants have been recieved to cover this point. So extra enjoyment time can make problem in job occupation.
As the afformentioned examples have illustrated, enjoyment in more thatn usual can cause serious problem in life of people. It damages learning procedure, helthiness and job occupation. As far as I am concerned, I posit that people shold manage their time to avoid being hurted.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...It decreases eagerness and enthusiastic an strengthen laziness that prevent people...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, if, so, then, thus, as to, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 8.0752688172 347% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1965.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01275510204 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82145970939 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55612244898 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.9607749908 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.7586206897 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5172413793 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.86206896552 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188898566163 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449536620823 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487266168212 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101056317392 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481531508072 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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